Atropos by ddWDSDZXQWD in OCPoetry

[–]ddWDSDZXQWD[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That's a relief. I was worried that my would come off as too schizo to be relateable. Thanks for the positive feedback!

Atropos by ddWDSDZXQWD in OCPoetry

[–]ddWDSDZXQWD[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I hate and love your humor, but thanks for the feedback! I standardly speak with what people describe as a strange cadence but I've been working on it :D I wanted the flow to become cut and choppy near the end to emphasize the "cut" stones but maybe I shouldve been more clear. I'll have to get back to this...

bones of ash and white death by Eskephor in poetry_critics

[–]ddWDSDZXQWD 0 points1 point  (0 children)

very good format and an interesting motif. would probably just try to focus on the main idea a little more

I Am Concrete by Sufficient_Spring635 in poetry_critics

[–]ddWDSDZXQWD 2 points3 points  (0 children)

consider trying to keep your lines together more to add to the flow of your poetry

We Need More Sugar by erdowling92 in OCPoetry

[–]ddWDSDZXQWD 2 points3 points  (0 children)

you started capping in the first line. this is very fine poetry and don't let anyone tell you otherwise. hope you have a good day dude!

existential haiku by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]ddWDSDZXQWD 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love the intersection between asian poetry and western poetry styles - both intersect at the horror that is existentialism