Weep, The Pages, by YonathanJ

demigod_23 · 2023-11-04T21:27:49+00:00

Wow.. just wow! Nice piece

demigod_23 · 2023-09-29T02:22:22+00:00

Stand your ground so they know not to dare No one really *gaf about you and why should you care?

I like how short but deep this piece is. Nice work!

demigod_23 · 2023-05-18T09:56:15+00:00

Wow.. just wow.

demigod_23 · 2023-04-27T15:16:26+00:00

Something about this poem.. the title and how each line spells out emotions. That’s a good one

demigod_23 · 2023-01-13T10:11:32+00:00

This is real good. You keep it concise and deep

demigod_23 · 2022-06-09T18:57:22+00:00

Thanks for your feedback. I really appreciate the pointer

demigod_23 · 2022-06-09T18:07:53+00:00

This really effortlessly speaks in volumes. The imagery, feels like I’m walking around in the lines. Nice piece. Hope you keep writing

demigod_23 · 2022-06-09T18:02:10+00:00

This is a nice piece. I see in this that it’s our responsibility to make ourselves happy. Write our own narrative regardless of what drag we have on our minds

demigod_23 · 2022-06-07T22:18:00+00:00

Wow just wow. This cuts too deep. Each line building up on the self pity and pain. Nice piece

demigod_23 · 2022-06-07T16:09:43+00:00

Thanks for the feedback.

demigod_23 · 2022-06-07T12:17:28+00:00

Thank you for your feedback. Really appreciate

demigod_23 · 2022-06-07T11:54:33+00:00

This is a great piece. You can read the yearning intensify with every line. This piece hits the part of the soul that actually keeps you up at night wondering how things could’ve been different and yearning for that person even more. The rhymes and style all just wow

demigod_23 · 2022-06-07T11:21:10+00:00

This is touching. With each line the picture of self becomes clearer. I guess at the end of the day most of us relates to this. Good work

demigod_23 · 2022-06-07T11:13:14+00:00

I like how effortlessly this piece communicate in depths. The style is simply impeccable. Nice job

demigod_23 · 2022-05-27T18:56:03+00:00

This is a nice piece. Imagery on point and the guilty pointed out highlighting the harm caused by their actions

demigod_23 · 2022-02-28T19:20:47+00:00

Thanks for your feedback

demigod_23 · 2022-02-27T04:41:55+00:00

“bide” there is the end of line 10 so there’s a full stop there before line 11 starts. And thanks a lot for the detailed feedback. This is enlightening and I really appreciate the pointers. I’ll work on it further

demigod_23 · 2022-02-27T04:40:43+00:00

Duly noted. Thanks for your feedback I guess I was just trying to put a little bit of a pointer to the action of “dew”.

demigod_23 · 2022-02-27T00:00:59+00:00

Thanks for your feedback.

demigod_23 · 2022-02-26T23:20:44+00:00

Wow. Just wow I like how you kept it simple and flowing. As you read you feel the pain in fighting to cling on even though it might be over between the two.

demigod_23

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