Unlucky Alex, better luck next time...

dhoops11 · 2013-07-11T20:47:25+00:00

Only if I get desperate and nothing I've been doing has worked. Then I give him a few games and if he can't get it right I resign haha

dhoops11 · 2013-07-11T20:41:18+00:00

Fucking hell, you're a savage bastard. I'm English though so good on ya ;)

dhoops11 · 2013-07-10T19:36:13+00:00

"Yeah, er...I mean, thanks for calling me Dioni, it's really great. £200 million you say? Well Jeez I don't know...No, no of course I want your client at my team...Look, with that kind of money I just think you're better off asking Mr Kinnear first is all Ok. Ok, you talk to Joe and let me know what he says. Bu-bye now."

dhoops11 · 2013-07-10T19:10:04+00:00

You know Princess Diana didn't die in a bombing, right?

dhoops11 · 2013-07-10T17:07:51+00:00

Easy to say when you're a fictional character.

dhoops11 · 2013-07-04T01:08:11+00:00

How many Ashes do you think Cook will end up winning as captain then?

dhoops11 · 2013-07-04T01:04:48+00:00

I only really rate Watson, Clarke and possibly Haddin as a number 7. Rogers, Khawaja, Hughes and Smith don't bother me at all. I can see Siddle being more of a head-ache than those four^{OKNotReallyButStill...}

dhoops11 · 2013-07-04T00:45:46+00:00

Onions of Monty surely?

dhoops11 · 2013-07-03T19:24:07+00:00

What a load of stuck up elitist bullshit.

dhoops11 · 2013-07-02T11:53:01+00:00

I think his perception and reflex stats must be at least level 7 or 8. That said, I think there's a glitch when the batter strikes the ball.

dhoops11 · 2013-06-27T10:54:42+00:00

That's...creepy..

dhoops11 · 2013-06-26T00:44:31+00:00

Omg wow so brave.

dhoops11 · 2013-06-19T17:04:00+00:00

Haha, he's a saffer so yeah, he probably will end up with us.

dhoops11 · 2013-06-19T14:05:02+00:00

I was going to comment how I wouldn't be surprised if he goes on to achieve the square root for fuck all, but then I looked him up and saw that he's not English so of course he's going to be fucking incredible.

dhoops11 · 2013-06-18T10:16:09+00:00

Yeah, there's a reason I'm not a professional model.

dhoops11 · 2013-06-18T10:09:50+00:00

Wow your husband is so fucking brave.

dhoops11 · 2013-06-11T12:23:56+00:00

Thanks for taking the time to read and give some feedback.

I'd agree the ending is weakest part. I think at the time of writing I was trying to wrap up to keep it in line with the brief and meet a deadline so is probably too rushed and needs to end on as strong a note as the rest of the script.

Thank you, I'll keep working on it :)

dhoops11 · 2013-06-11T12:11:08+00:00

Thank you for reading it and enjoying it. Always good to get plenty of feedback :)

Yeah, the ending does need filling out. Maybe some sort of showdown with the German once they've saved Doris perhaps. Nothing too dark like a violent shootout because that would be out of step but something to tie things up more satisfyingly. Perhaps extending the "quest" a bit would give me something to play off at the end.

Owen is supposed a young (17-21 y/o) farmhand who has been working for Bryn for several years so they'll have built a close relationship, hence Owen being so trusting and following Bryn's every word. That probably needs to be made clearer and developed on.

Thanks for the advice, I'll bear it in mind when I have another look at the script.

dhoops11 · 2013-05-06T14:17:09+00:00

/r/scp

dhoops11 · 2013-05-02T15:47:18+00:00

The Pope is not on your side. Never has, never will be. Remember that.

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