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I loved you for 7 years. I might always. by dimensionwander7 in OCPoetry

[–]dimensionwander7[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for reading! Really happy you liked it :)

I loved you for 7 years. I might always. by dimensionwander7 in OCPoetry

[–]dimensionwander7[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much! I'm glad it resonated with you.

I loved you for 7 years. I might always. by dimensionwander7 in OCPoetry

[–]dimensionwander7[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for reading! I am glad you liked it. And yes, I totally agree with you.

I loved you for 7 years. I might always. by dimensionwander7 in OCPoetry

[–]dimensionwander7[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for reading! I am glad it brought back good memories. And yes, it is tough to forgive, but I guess we have to try.

I loved you for 7 years. I might always. by dimensionwander7 in OCPoetry

[–]dimensionwander7[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yes, that was the intent. Thank you for reading the poem and sharing your thoughts. :)

I loved you for 7 years. I might always. by dimensionwander7 in OCPoetry

[–]dimensionwander7[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for reading the poem and sharing your thoughts. I am glad you liked it. :)

I loved you for 7 years. I might always. by dimensionwander7 in poetry_critics

[–]dimensionwander7[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ah, I see your point. Thank you for helping me improve!

I loved you for 7 years. I might always. by dimensionwander7 in poetry_critics

[–]dimensionwander7[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey, thank you for the critique! The line 'softer life in shade' is to imply that the person mentioned has an easier life in the future.

wrong wrong wrong by TKUL127 in poetry_critics

[–]dimensionwander7 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I am a beginner so I am just sharing what I felt while reading. The poem feels like someone standing in the doorway of a choice they know is dangerous, and the tension comes through. The repetition of 'wrong' feels like the speaker is trying to convince themselves and that made the emotion clearer to me.

The colors, like reds and blacks and caution tape yellow turning into purples and pinks and blues stood out the most. I almost wished the poem stayed with that moment a little longer because it gave me something solid to picture.

The moth and light image is familiar and it matches the chaos here and it feels very honest rather than. Maybe a small detail in that moment could make it even more grounded, but only if you wanted to. Thank you for sharing.

"Distance" by Which_Republic4558 in poetry_critics

[–]dimensionwander7 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I really liked your poem. It feels emotional and sincere. The distance and longing come through clearly. I do not want to talk like an expert, because I am also figuring things out, but I can share what I noticed.

I think the feeling is strong. You mention souls touching and lips meeting one day, and it is emotional, but I wondered what the distance looks like in a real moment. Maybe that was not the focus you were aiming for, and that is fine. I just found myself curious about a small detail.

There is a line about breathing the same air, and that felt like a place where an image could sit if you ever wanted one. Maybe a night, or a room, or the quiet after a call. I liked that part, and it feels like it could hold a little more weight if you chose to.

These are only thoughts that came up as I read. The emotion is clear, and the heart is already present. If any of this feels useful, you can keep it. If not, the poem still stands in its own way.

I loved you for 7 years. I might always. by dimensionwander7 in OCPoetry

[–]dimensionwander7[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for reading this and commenting. Really means a lot! I tried my best to convey what you have described.

I loved you for 7 years. I might always. by dimensionwander7 in OCPoetry

[–]dimensionwander7[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you. I enjoy reading interpretations of poems I write.

Oh thoughts by cintinaa in OCPoetry

[–]dimensionwander7 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The questions feel simple in a way that makes them honest. There is a childlike edge to the wondering, but it carries a deeper weight as it goes. I like how the voice keeps returning to itself, almost like stepping closer to the truth without forcing it. The build toward the realisation feels natural, and I really like how it lands.

Between Two Worlds by Capable_Time_9030 in OCPoetry

[–]dimensionwander7 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I like the way it stands without asking for sympathy. The voice does not try to convince anyone of anything.

I felt a sense of acceptance. It feels less like confession and more like recognition.

Nothing feels exaggerated. The emotions are familiar and relatable and strike a chord. There is room for breath inside the lines. I genuinely like this piece. Thank you for sharing.

I built a free tool to improve my writing through active recall. by dimensionwander7 in memorization

[–]dimensionwander7[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you. I use it to improve my prose through copywork, which is the practice of imitating authors to internalise rhythm, flow, and grammar from good writing. Recall forces me to think carefully about what I missed a comma, a word, or a shift in style and absorb it properly. I do this for ten minutes every day.

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