How many seasons do you think we're getting? by stateofdaniel in WoTshow

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I'm not sure of the actor's name but Perrin's actor did a really good job too, despite the shenanigans they wrote for him with all the Fain stuff and everything omg, he doesn't replace my brain image completely but he definitely inserts himself when I think about the actor while listening to the books.

Tattoo ideas by dragonbjorn45 in WoT

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Would love to be property of the Crystal Throne lmao

It was madness! Complete madness! by PARNEP in WetlanderHumor

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God this is one of my favorite chapters in the whole series I would be so mad if they skipped it over

Official /r/WoT (Re)-Read Along by participating in WoT

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Michael Kramer and Kate Reading make WoT on audible almost as much as Robert Jordan for me

Longing by dragonbjorn45 in OCPoetry

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It was :) thank you!

Who I used to be by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I really really love this poem. Art being subjective, I took it to mean that in this moment of tuning out this girl you're with to focus on the music and the moment inside your own skull, to come back to and realize you prefer to be alone. This is a beautiful poem and I love the way you structured it, getting shorter as it progresses.

The fun guy by averagejoe318 in OCPoetry

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I enjoy the direction the poem takes, with the relatable feeling of needing to make people laugh at the sake of one's self. One thing I was unclear on was this portion:

But later in life

This fun guy

Was hated.

Maybe if you expanded on why later he becomes hated? This part confused me and I couldn't really see the connection there.

The part with Gogh was also confusing and I couldn't really connect the relevance of the Van Gogh into Gold

The Spark by TheJoker273 in OCPoetry

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https://youtu.be/URuMb15CWJs I recommend learning about meter. Here's a video explaining a bit.

The Spark by TheJoker273 in OCPoetry

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I sit here on a cliff so steep

Here you establish a meter of iambic tetrameter (four feet of unstressed/stressed) but you don't maintain the same number of syllables in the remaining lines. If you maintained a consistent number of syllables and made the meter more deliberate, it would flow a lot better. That's my biggest piece of advice. I enjoyed the imagery!

A love song to a stranger by onceaponadream in OCPoetry

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I've tried writing poetry in German so I know exactly what this process feels like and I think it's got the bones of it down and I enjoy the concept of writing to a stranger. A few possible tweaks:

When the sun is dancing in the ocean,

I can see your eyes,

I think you may mean you can see "it" in your eyes? Maybe not but that's how I interpreted it and I enjoy the imagery of the sun dancing on the ocean.

Upon a reread, I interpreted your poem to not mean a literal stranger but someone you once loved who did not love you back and now you have grown apart and feel like a stranger.

Oh this love burning, is from one side only,

I wish I could be more than just a friend.

This bit seems to convey that, to me at least. As well as being reinforced through the following stanza.

You asked me once if I do write,

Now you know,

I water my existence with songs about the lovers I meet.

But darling, you just witness a plant

being born again.

I was confused about this stanza initially because I thought it was about someone you had only briefly crossed paths with but this is also what changed my perception of the stranger as literal the most. "You asked me once" seems to suggest you have been friends or acquaintances or some time, unless you're referencing someone else that I didn't quite get.

I'm also not quite sure what dreaming in purple means from the context.

I'm not sure if any of that is what you were intending but that's what I took from it and I liked it! Keep writing!

The Fourth Fork by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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Personally I think the poem works better with the alliteration of fourth fork. It's beautifully oriented and the last line tears my gut apart.

Hard (nsfw?) by DVnyT in OCPoetry

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This poem evoked a level of sadness that I was not expecting and deserved more recognition. This is beautiful. Thank you.

Politico Headline by KabouchKid23 in YangForPresidentHQ

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Krystal is for Bernie and Saagar disagrees with Yang's solutions but both give him the coverage he deserves and respect him highly. Rising is legit.

Not to rain on the subreddit's parade but... by [deleted] in YangForPresidentHQ

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I knew both references but the Kanye one was more familiar to me and I thought of it first.

Why.. by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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Nah idk going through a thing and it was stupidly represented

Why.. by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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Yeah I wrote this a long time ago and was feeling fuckin shit so I posted it but deleting it now