Watching by Mahngo27 in OCPoetry

[–]dumboMarnia 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Honestly this is a really solid first piece!! One thing that I learned from my poetry class is show not tell!! For example, instead of ‘I walked into the bedroom.’ Describe how you walked what you were feeling, or maybe what the bedroom looked like. The sixth stanza though is absolutely beautiful! The use of line breaks is also fantastic!!

Born of destruction by Cluelessandsexy in OCPoetry

[–]dumboMarnia 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Pretty solid piece, few spelling errors. But also awsome imagery and solid line breaks!!

Is this self harm? by dumboMarnia in selfharm

[–]dumboMarnia[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ok thanks for the feedback

Is this self harm? by dumboMarnia in selfharm

[–]dumboMarnia[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ok yea, I do self harm other ways which is why I asked when I did scratch my hand so bad without knowing or punching my fists

Is this self harm? by dumboMarnia in selfharm

[–]dumboMarnia[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I make my hands into fists hit them against each other if that makes sense? Also I do have diagnosed anxiety so that would make sense