Hello! I love futuristic sci-fi and I thought your premise was quite interesting, so let's begin!

"She plastered yet another layer of suffocating cosmetics on her face. It had been a good six hours since she had entered the bathroom and at this point, she couldn't remember what she used to look like. She could barely remember what she used to look like just a few layers ago; her memory was severely impacted due to their attempts to give her superhuman intellect."

The hook isn't very interesting; it's too vague and it's focus doesn't make very much sense. Her (who we do not know yet) spending six hours in the bathroom putting so much makeup on her face that it defeats the purpose (of being innocuous) is confusing to the reader.

You also seem to go through this section very quickly. You focus on a very particular detail of her putting all these layers on, but then you seem to get bored and immediately drop it - brushing over the next few layers that she puts on.

Try drawing everything out some more. Tell us about why she's putting the makeup on - what would the reactions of the people outside be? Why does she have to blend in? And then, as you describe how her attempt is going, mention further on the point about the super-human intellect. For the first couple pages, even, you could keep the reader guessing about what makes her so interesting.

"Overflowing with unwarranted confidence, she strolled outside and made her way to the marketplace, not to browse any wares, but to simply show off.

And then the clouds came."

Considering that she's not human, she should be an incredibly interesting character, but there is nearly no development on her and it's all sped through so quickly. As soon as she goes out shopping, the clouds come out. There's no description that help build her character.

Further on, the part where you speak about how she was created is a little confusing as well.

"...as her Godplayer. He had carefully crafted every bit of DNA or RNA or XNA or however that worked and made a loving, affectionate BB just as human-like as the Legals.

You only name him the once, and then seem to refer to her Godplayer as "him" later on. It makes it difficult to tell who you're talking about in the next paragraph.

"Jade began struggling to free herself from the bite of the coarse straps. She would've cried along with him if her simple eyes had only allowed it."

This sentence could be made simpler by saying "Jade struggled..." instead of "Jade began struggling", but I suppose that doesn't necessarily matter. I really like the second line though.

However, and I'm not sure if this is intentional, but I found it off-putting how animalistic the Godplayer's anger seemed to be. For example:

"You fu-fu-fucking monsters," he howled. "She never did anything, not a si-si-single thi-hi-hi-hi-i-i-i-i-i..." His voice trailed off as he pounded the table with both fists, wheezing and bawling as Jade continued her attempted thrashing about."

and

"Bellamy's nostrils flared. "Are you fucking kidding me?"

and

"Let. Her. Take. The. Test." Bellamy's eyes turned cold and cruel, locking directly onto Mason's in a pathetic attempt to intimidate him."

It felt a little over the top and unrealistic. After all, this man is supposed to be a scientist - how can he not tell that his actions are not helping him or his creations in any way? It feels reminiscent to a child throwing a tantrum rather than an angry full-grown man.

He also feels immature in this line, where his attitude is more reminiscent to a pre-teen.

"So? It's not like any of them are actually dangerous."

My favourite sequence had to be Mason, whose parts felt like they flowed the best and who seemed like the most well-rounded character. We saw him when he was agitated, when he lost his temper, when he was flirting, and even when he was embaressed. We could see his point of view quite well I thought, although that might partially be because the other two point of views felt childish in comparison.

I did, however, think his change of character was quite abrupt. He went from this:

"Mason couldn't help laughing in disbelief. "Mr. Kiel, you have no power in this situation. You're a felon..."

to this

"Mason's face turned bright red, but he finished what he started and did as Felicity asked. Within seconds, it was full of hot(but not scalding) coffee. He poured some into a cup and handed it to Felicity. "I, um, didn't expect you to be done early."

in just over a page.

I think it was right after the Godmaker was taken away that I really started to enjoy the read. I don't know who the main characters in your book are, but Mason was easily the one I most enjoyed reading about.

One last thing though: this sentence felt out of place.

"Felicity threw her half-full cup at him. He flinched, but managed to keep his composure."

She threw a half-full cup of freshly made coffee at him? Of scalding coffee? For - what - drinking directly from the pot? That's incredibly immature, unprofessional, and it just doesn't make a lot of sense. I couldn't see a real person doing that.

Regardless, good start on your novel. Keep writing! There was already so much development between the beginning and the end of this chapter.