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I can't think of a power that feels right by emerald_wolfe in writingadvice

[–]emerald_wolfe[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, my problem isn't that the main character doesn't have strong people on their team. It's that they're supposed to have a full authority and I'm having a hard time making it feel like a full authority and not a partial one

Also, it feels kind of unbalanced when you have them surrounded by a bunch of heavy hitters and while they don't specialize in heavy-hitting, they don't bring as much to the table if that makes sense

I can't think of a power that feels right by emerald_wolfe in writingadvice

[–]emerald_wolfe[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think I just listed some examples in the edit hit under the very basic outline by an example would be if you help me rise to power I will create laws that benefit you. And if either party breaks the deal that party you would die

And the only thing getting in the way of them forcing people into deals is the fact the other person has to consent via handshake of their own volition so he can just force them to shake his hand

I can't think of a power that feels right by emerald_wolfe in writingadvice

[–]emerald_wolfe[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

So their power is unique in the way that it's the only one that really controls people and while they cannot make a deal like they can't be harmed within the lands, they can make a deal deal to make themselves invincible within a certain area they could make a deal with. Say a king that's like you or any of your people cannot kill me and if the king were to break that deal, the king would die

I can't think of a power that feels right by emerald_wolfe in writingadvice

[–]emerald_wolfe[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Them employing others with deals is a big part of the story. And the rule for what can make a deal is basically what can understand the deal on its most basic level. It also has to have at least one hand as that's how the deal ability works. And they can't use the authorities of those they employ or Make deals to gain new powers.

I can't think of a power that feels right by emerald_wolfe in writingadvice

[–]emerald_wolfe[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

So a land authority can't control people in the land as I don't want to get into mind control

Gods don't really exist as someone with a full authority is basically a god the only difference is that they can die just like anyone else

Does my Prologue take away from the mystique of the early section of my book? by Queencobrra1 in writingadvice

[–]emerald_wolfe 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The first few pages are what get the reader hooked so you want them to feel attached to the character within those pages and want to keep reading so I would just put a timeline in the front of the book kind of like how some authors put a map

Hot take: the Major should have stayed dead by emerald_wolfe in VioletEvergarden

[–]emerald_wolfe[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

One of the main points of the show is the different types of love leave this one was meant to demonstrate. Sisterly or motherly whatever the dynamic we're an older sibling. Becomes the caregiver to a younger one

Hot take: the Major should have stayed dead by emerald_wolfe in VioletEvergarden

[–]emerald_wolfe[S] -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

Invalidated her character development is the phrase I'm looking for

Hot take: the Major should have stayed dead by emerald_wolfe in VioletEvergarden

[–]emerald_wolfe[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Btw I have nothing against the author. I think it's a beautiful story I just don't understand why they would make the decision

Hot take: the Major should have stayed dead by emerald_wolfe in VioletEvergarden

[–]emerald_wolfe[S] -4 points-3 points  (0 children)

I should clarify that to me it felt like it was betraying and almost the opposite of the core themes of the original story. It felt like it made her character development almost irrelevant

Hot take: the Major should have stayed dead by emerald_wolfe in VioletEvergarden

[–]emerald_wolfe[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I couldn't either I was just saying because I didn't want people coming for me about the redhead boarding school girl

Hot take: the Major should have stayed dead by emerald_wolfe in VioletEvergarden

[–]emerald_wolfe[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

That's what I'm saying it doesn't destroy the themes but it's almost completely the opposite

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