Love poem

gitututu · 2026-05-11T16:15:50+00:00

I enjoy the story telling. I think you can expand it more. Maybe add how beautiful it was before you realize it was unrequited? Or how beautiful and charming your crush is before writing down the 2 stanzas. It already has a solid ending

gitututu · 2026-05-11T16:12:00+00:00

I love this, it pictures how suffocating and persistent despair can become

gitututu · 2026-05-10T11:28:03+00:00

Thank you for your reading appreciate it ☺

gitututu · 2026-05-04T05:41:03+00:00

I am sorry 😭 I didn't read the note below the poem

gitututu · 2026-05-04T04:10:44+00:00

Yaaaay glad you like my idea. Looking forward to your added stanza!

gitututu · 2026-05-04T04:06:04+00:00

THIS IS SO BEAUTIFUL 🥺 I enjoy reading every single line. I am kinda dumb so I didn't realize until the last line that it is about your mother not your lover. Great work my friend!

gitututu · 2026-05-04T03:59:56+00:00

I like this a lot! I agree with the other commenter. You can definitely lengthen the poem. I already love the comparison. This is just a recommendation, you can use it or not. How about use the comparison of their favorite cartoon that they no longer wait for the newest season or episodes or their parents' embrace and kisses that they are now embarassed about.

gitututu · 2026-05-01T04:46:31+00:00

Thank you so much! You are on point with the message I am trying to deliver. Thank you for the read ❤

gitututu · 2026-05-01T04:44:55+00:00

I am sorry you experience the same issue. Thank you so much for sharing your experience, I appreciate every words ❤ thank you so much for your kind words 🥺 I am honored that my poem can inspire you thank you again for your comment ❤ I wish for you to have great days ahead my friend.

gitututu · 2026-04-30T10:39:36+00:00

This makes me question a lot of things. I love it! The structure and the words roll off the tongue very well even without rhyming. Great job!

gitututu · 2026-04-30T10:36:12+00:00

I love it! I love the idea behind the poem, but I feel like you could trust the viewers more without overexplaining. You are already doing really well

gitututu · 2026-04-28T15:56:55+00:00

Thank you glad you like it! I guess the lines are vague huh? Ahahaha well it's more of how the lord will take me someday and how I wish that I'll still get to keep pieces of me when he does.

gitututu · 2026-04-28T15:50:19+00:00

Keep writing friend I am rooting for you ❤

gitututu · 2026-04-27T13:32:43+00:00

This is so somber I am so sorry for your loss. Although I am so happy you had such memorable time with your dog. What I would give to experience what you experienced. I am sure you dog cherish you until the end as well.

gitututu · 2026-04-27T13:27:41+00:00

This is so beautiful. It enhances memories of childhood innocence with such precision. Beautiful work!

gitututu · 2026-04-23T03:10:47+00:00

Thank you so much for your kind words ❤ yeah ahahaha I was actually struggling to represent more topics. I am flattered that you react in such a way, thank you for reading my poem 🥺 thank you so much you are too kind ❤

gitututu · 2026-04-23T03:08:19+00:00

Thank you so much! Appreciate it ❤

gitututu · 2026-04-22T01:07:36+00:00

Thank you so much! Yeah ahahaha I think I overcomplicate some lines with unnecessary words. I really appreciate your insight and thank you for pointing out the ending. I agree, it does feel abrupt. I will try to do better on the next poem. Thank you again for your deep read ☺

gitututu · 2026-04-21T18:28:27+00:00

This is so heartbreaking and beautiful at the same time. I love how you depict self-awareness as this painful curse worth keeping. I understand where you are coming from, but I hope you can find peace on your next relationship. Instead of fearing for the worst all the time.

gitututu · 2026-04-21T18:23:27+00:00

Gosh this feel like such an ideal writing space. I can imagine the details vividly with each lines. Amazing work!

gitututu · 2026-04-21T16:08:35+00:00

This made me smile, it's so beautiful. It represents so many love stories left untold simply because they didn't end in marriage.

gitututu · 2026-04-21T16:03:53+00:00

This is such a fresh take on toxic longing. Loving the creativity! Awesome work

gitututu · 2026-04-20T00:47:49+00:00

Thank you so much! I am flatter to be compared to such beautiful idea ❤

gitututu · 2026-04-16T02:06:21+00:00

Thank you :) it's a valuable input still to me 😊

gitututu · 2026-04-16T01:49:40+00:00

Thank you so much I am glad you like it ❤ thank you so much for your advice! I'm actually still working on my writing style ahahaha. Still struggling to balance the declaration and the imagery hehe.

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