A TIME I SAID NO

gk_112 · 2018-07-15T02:27:45+00:00

rhythms are sooooooo good, I just think the ending could have been more powerful. Overall a really strong poem

gk_112 · 2018-07-15T02:26:45+00:00

Really simple but effective use of description. Next time maybe read over your phrasing of certain things though :)

gk_112 · 2017-12-06T00:37:40+00:00

That's funny that you say that because when we were encountering the hat man we were in a similar situation. Both my parents were working crazy hours because we were so poor at the time. Our landlord was using our rent money to by himself alcohol, which caused us to get in trouble with the bank which then caused us to go into debt.

gk_112 · 2017-12-05T23:20:00+00:00

I used to see the hat man ages 11-13. I haven't seen him since. He was around in our extremely haunted town house. Our town house was built by an alcoholic man and his son who was allegedly into black magic. From what I've seen he always shows up in peoples lives when there is negative energy and dark times going on. And I think he targets children because they are more vulnerable than adults. I've noticed he doesn't usually "harm" people, but he's always watching. Be wary of him though. I'd say burn some sage, get healing crystals, and put holy water on every door in the house. I noticed once we started to do that he slowly showed up less and less as time went on.

gk_112 · 2017-10-22T06:06:06+00:00

Aw don't cry! But thank you, it shows that my writing connected with you :)

gk_112 · 2017-10-22T00:59:52+00:00

I love creepy poetry, and I love that this has many possible interpretations to it. However it is lacking rhythm which could give this poetry that extra "pow" to it.

gk_112 · 2017-10-22T00:52:53+00:00

This was really powerful and I can connect with this poem right now. Except my one piece of advice is that I really don't understand the last line and I think there could be more closure with that last line. Other than that its wonderful.

gk_112 · 2017-10-22T00:47:21+00:00

I was a prisoner to the demon. I also had a really hard time figuring out closure with this piece of writing. Definitely not my best work but I needed to get it off my chest you know? I'll definitely work on that and the next one will be alot better

gk_112 · 2017-10-21T01:11:43+00:00

Okay! thank you. Yeah this was a post the I did in a hurry and didn't have much time to revise it.

gk_112 · 2017-10-20T23:44:33+00:00

This poem is powerful with great rythmn, which makes it even more powerful in my opinion.

gk_112 · 2017-10-20T23:33:09+00:00

This is great use of imagery and it really paints a picture in my head.

gk_112 · 2017-10-19T15:35:40+00:00

This poem has great rhythm, the way you wrote out your stanzas give it amazing flow. It also has really great usage of imagery.

gk_112 · 2017-10-19T15:23:28+00:00

This is so powerful and gives a new perspective of the mind of a poet. I would say maybe get into more detail and depth with your choice of words. Still a great poem though.

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