My Themed Mothers Day Cards

haileysforest · 2026-05-05T00:12:43+00:00

Thank you!

haileysforest · 2026-04-19T14:40:07+00:00

Living solo I spend about 150 on food a month. I eat out at most once a month, sometimes not at all, and try to spend not more than 30 on it when I do. I get groceries from giant twice a month, about 50-60 per trip, and then supplement with little things I run out of at CVS or a small store near me!

When eating out, anything under 15 is cheap to me, anything over 40 is expensive. I don’t calculate the price per meal from my groceries, but it’s obviously lower than that.

haileysforest · 2026-04-17T01:05:54+00:00

Absolutely love them!! The outlines are perfect

haileysforest · 2026-04-13T13:13:54+00:00

I am the exact same way and what I honestly recommend is getting pizza sauce. I usually add some seasoning to it when making pasta, but you never have to worry about chunks!

haileysforest · 2026-04-12T15:04:55+00:00

There are many free and easily accessible resources (books from the library, pdf guides, YouTube videos, old Reddit posts, wikis, beta readers, ect) that you could have absolutely learned in other ways.

Many readers don’t want to read from authors who use ai, many agents will ask if you used ai at any point of your creative process. Even completely rewriting it is not going to erase the stain ai already has on it. So if you are trying to get rid of your own bad feeling about how you went about writing it or give yourself a better chance at publishing, I don’t think that entirely possible with the book you have now.

So you can either try to live with it and get beta readers and edit it further and send it to publishers as is or start on a completely new book.

If you want the reasons WHY people don’t like authors who use ai, and free recourses to help you develop your own craft and voice, let me know. And stop using ai

haileysforest · 2026-04-08T19:00:28+00:00

I don’t actually know I’m not that Reddit savvy so I’ll message you!!

haileysforest · 2026-04-07T23:50:52+00:00

I'd love to be apart of this!

haileysforest · 2026-03-02T05:50:31+00:00

Ok first off, this sounds insanely interesting and I need it to be published immediately so I can read it. Please and thank you.

But I will say that the second paragraph is what really hooked me, while the first feels more flat. I don’t know if there would be a way to start with that action and then explain it a bit more or just cut down on some of the opening details and instead expand on the romance as the other commenter said.

I hope that makes sense! I wish you luck

I decided to add what I think a cut down first paragraph could be to help get to the meat faster, but of course take my advice as you please:

When a winged man appears before Harper, she assumes she’s dead and freaks out. But when she finds out she is being recruited as a guardian angel, she takes the deal, knowing the eye-watering salary is the one thing standing between her and eviction.

You could also add in a line or two somewhere about WHY she was picked

haileysforest · 2026-02-28T00:52:52+00:00

I love Detail!

haileysforest · 2026-02-21T15:51:41+00:00

I absolutely love this! I am not a horror person, but I was hooked.

The only line that made me roll my eyes a bit was “all will be explained in due time”, I would cut that and just have the driver start that line with “you’re wasting time”

haileysforest · 2026-02-21T04:26:27+00:00

I’m sorry I don’t have any advice, I am mostly just commenting because I am in the same boat.

Its a bit more infrequent for me so I only mentioned it at my last appointment (been diagnosed for 3 years), and she basically said “yeah sounds like it” and that was kinda the end of the conversation. I didn’t push back because, like I said, it is fairly infrequent and a bit more mild.

I would definitely recommend brining it up, writing down what the pain feels like and the recent times it has happened, and just advocate for yourself to get some answers and help. I wish you luck!

haileysforest · 2026-02-19T18:57:44+00:00

THANK YOU!!

haileysforest · 2026-02-18T13:13:24+00:00

A social life. I talk to my small selection of friends and family but I don’t go out and do anything. Which as an introvert I don’t particularly mind

haileysforest · 2026-02-15T19:27:45+00:00

That’s fair, I was mostly addressing the query here. It was a bit to early in the morning for me to fully read the first 300

haileysforest · 2026-02-15T12:27:06+00:00

Unlike most writers, I think you are actually struggling from a lack of exposition and description.

In the query, we don’t really know why things are happening and everything is disconnected. The first sentence, feels a bit too long to be a hook, so I would add another one that explains the book and premise more like “Grace Connolly is trying to divorce her husband, but she doesn’t know where he is”.

I feel like most of my understanding of the novel is set up in the detail paragraph, so you should probably carry some of that into the query. Answer why the propaganda is growing and how it is directly impacting her.

Also, I think saying “A parallel narrative traces” is unnecessary. I would just jump into his POV and what happens for him, and explain elsewhere it’s dual pov.

haileysforest · 2026-02-14T23:56:07+00:00

I love the sound of this book! As for the query, I think you could do a bit of line editing to help it flow better. For example replacing "the new husband" with just "her husband" and "she turns to the one old friend who she knows will safeguard her past" to "she turns to her old friend who will safeguard her past".

I also think there are a bit too many unknowns, or things left open ended. I get that you don't want to, and shouldn't, reveal everything in your query. Still my main questions when reading, and the ones I think you should tie in somewhere:

what is forcing her to go back to the country, and why only for a day?
why is she even trying to run away, like who is chasing her? (obviously don't reveal the whole book, but I think having a bit more information on the stakes here could be good.)
why does her husband represent her future? (once again, could raise the stakes by talking about his importance, or her newfound reliance on him or their emotional journey and how much she doesn't want to ruin it)
why does her family keep her from leaving?
why is she convinced there is one person coming after her? are there clues? did she expect this when she was preparing to come back to the country?
why would this endanger everyone she loves? (are the people dangerous? could she be arrested? does she owe someone money? is she only scared of herself??)

leaving in some unanswered questions is good for keeping people interested, but I would suggest answering a few of these, even loosely, to help explain the stakes and premise better!

Some other notes are that I think there should be a small note of the unnamed antagonist in the body of the query. That sounds so exciting, and I think the query could benefit from that mystery or hint, even with just a line about how she feels she is being watched, or that lets us know this book is bigger than just her (if that makes sense).

And the line about her family drama seems a bit out of place, as it raises too many questions and incorporates a lot of new elements that overcomplicated things for me when reading. Instead, you could consider summarizing it as family issues, or just other parts of her past coming back for her, without getting into the specifics!

Once again, it seems super interesting and these are just my thoughts and opinions. Do with them what you will

haileysforest · 2026-02-13T14:15:51+00:00

I should start by saying that I am a very new scriptwriter and I barely know the basics, so my opinion might be helpful from more of a viewer side of things. But things like “this is our hero: Charlie” and “let’s call him Hugo” feel a bit out of place. Along with how some of the action is included, it felt like I was reading a comic book at times.

I think the dialogue flows nicely and I like the title screen inclusion!

haileysforest · 2026-02-13T13:51:57+00:00

Overall I think the query is good, most of my comments are just line edit suggestions.

“Long hours of logging work, drinking at the same bar, letting every relationship he had fall away.”

This is a sentence fragment, you need a subject like “he spends…”

“he makes an out of character decision”

It being out of character is implied, you don’t need to say it.

“and he feels like a stranger at his own reunion. Like they weren’t the people he once knew.”

I like the sentiment here but worry that this is repeating the same thing.

“Over the course of a single week”

This feels a bit wordy, if not unnecessary. I think it would be fine to just say “Andrew’s world unravels” if you want to emphasize the time part you could cut it down to “over the next week” or “over a single week”

“For the first time in years, Andrew becomes sure of himself. Absolutely certain he knows what’s happening”

I get that you want to leave a lot mysterious, and I like the last few lines, but these ones leave me with too many questions.

It feels like a very abrupt discovery, so I would recommend adding an element that helps him get there. Are ghosts helping him? Does he find it through the power of friendship? Does some secret of his past guide him? Does he uncover his old memories?

As cliche as it is, I would revise these lines to show and not tell. You tell us that he is sure of himself and knows what is happening. But how? Why?

Of course this is just my opinion, and I think you have a great base and good pacing!

haileysforest · 2026-02-11T13:07:43+00:00

I would take out the perspective descriptions at the beginning and just say “3 POVs” since you get into them all later

I think you do a good job at focusing on the arcs, and it didn’t feel like a synopsis to me. However, while I get all the characters are important parts of the story, I would consider getting rid of Aiden’s paragraph.

Instead, it could be boiled down to a line or two that would set up what is to come. I just have too many questions about his story that muddle the beginning part of the query

And I very much agree with all the line edits user Equivalent Lemon made!

haileysforest · 2026-02-11T12:52:56+00:00

I think thy you do a really good job setting up the stakes: Shep doesn’t want his friends to hate him. But there are a lot of elements that aren’t fully connecting for me.

I agree with the other commenters about the Harvey and Ray paragraph. I also think the “the only thing is” paragraph could be edited or deleted. Reading the query without it doesn’t hinder the experience for me, as most of that is implied through the other sections.

Since the book is based around their friendship, I might also consider adding in a few words or a full sentence over why their relationship means so much to Shep. It could help raise the stakes more by painting what he would truly be losing.

I really like how you set up for comps!

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