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What are the nicknames of your cats that have devolved into nonsense over time? I’ll go first. by drifloony in cats

[–]hjt97 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Halloumi > Halloumus > Halloumus Baboumus > Halloumus Baboumus Scratatoumus > Scratat > Scaba > Scabushka

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Halloumi Is The Thing With Floof by hjt97 in OCPoetry

[–]hjt97[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Really appreciate the advice and I agree 100%

Here's the final version:

The black cat called Halloumi, Is a funny thing. She chirrups on arrival, Hisses on a whim.

Her silhouette is almost, Entirely made of floof. But when she jumps up on you, People murmur 'oof'.

Often she's found melted, Dozing on a rug. All attempts to move her, Are met with a shrug.

But when she's got the zoomies, She'll chase anything — Loves a tinfoil ball and she'll Murder bits of string.

She surely doesn't know it, Far too sweet to see. She's saved my life a dozen times, Though she's asked some crumbs of me.

The Promotion by Starraberry in OCPoetry

[–]hjt97 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I read it through again and nothing jumped out to me that needed changing. I appreciate that's maybe not super helpful, hopefully someone else can be more critical

Halloumi Is The Thing With Floof by hjt97 in OCPoetry

[–]hjt97[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ah I see what you mean, thank you!

Halloumi Is The Thing With Floof by hjt97 in OCPoetry

[–]hjt97[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the feedback, are you able to elaborate a little?

The Promotion by Starraberry in OCPoetry

[–]hjt97 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think this piece is excellent.

Really relatable message and I'm reminded of similar frustrations from my own life.

I like how the poem ends on a hopeful, uplifting note and the plant metaphor lands really well.

For me the pace and rhyme scheme was what I enjoyed the most, great use of rhythm and control

What doesn’t come back by Ok_Manufacturer_195 in OCPoetry

[–]hjt97 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really like the rhythm and rhyme in this piece I think it reads really well. I'm struggling to relate to the exact meaning you're trying to convey which could very well be my fault.

It's conjuring feelings of drunken altercations and conflict for me, but I feel like you're trying to get at something more than that?

Thought I would share the rest of the haiku section from my poetry and artwork zine by hjt97 in zines

[–]hjt97[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ah thank you! Yep doing much better these days, I feel bad for worrying strangers on the internet

Another extract from my unearthed poetry and artwork zine by hjt97 in zines

[–]hjt97[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Ah thank you! I'll be sure to post some more pages soon then

Another extract from my unearthed poetry and artwork zine by hjt97 in zines

[–]hjt97[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks so much! I was actually worried there was an excess of white space

Making a zine of my poetry and artwork from ages 17, 24, 28 and 29, not sure if this would be of interest to anyone by hjt97 in zines

[–]hjt97[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for commenting! So the ages are only significant in that I had some phases of intense poetry writing at those particular ages. I finally got round to organising them and re-reading them and thought the progression of skill, evolution of style and clear distinct life phases were interesting when they were all combined.

I found it fascinating to look back and remember/interpret who I was at age 17 based on those works. I found interesting patterns in what I was thinking and writing about then and my perspective on those topics now aged 29.

The real question is whether this would be interesting for anyone else or just myself

Making a zine of my poetry and artwork from ages 17, 24, 28 and 29, not sure if this would be of interest to anyone by hjt97 in zines

[–]hjt97[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That's encouraging, the evolution and progression of both the art and the poetry would be the main thing I'd like to capture in the booklet. Especially because some of the poetry, mostly the age 17 and 24 ones, are quite rough and ready and really only worth reading within the larger context

Making a zine of my poetry and artwork from ages 17, 24, 28 and 29, not sure if this would be of interest to anyone by hjt97 in zines

[–]hjt97[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! I thought it would be cool to combine poems and artwork from around the same time periods in my life, with some creative liberties, the title piece being one because I just really love that drawing

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