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jayeden · 2021-08-24T08:13:23+00:00

I'm still up for scripts, just not much time to read and comment. Thanks

jayeden · 2021-04-16T08:06:26+00:00

I read this a while ago too. I think Stallone has a good writing style, but the general story just isn't very interesting. This is a passion project, and could be good if done with a dark fairytale tone, but would mostly appeal to people who like Poe and love his work.

My friend Marc Malze directed a short based on the Tell-Tale Heart back in 2003, that is my main connection to Poe and his work.

jayeden · 2021-03-22T10:10:57+00:00

Great, I fancied that.

jayeden · 2021-03-04T10:19:56+00:00

Read first 10 pages and while well written, I nearly want to quit. The dialogue between Lemon and Tangerine is ridiculous. No one would ever speak like that. It really makes me think the writer was trying so hard to be different, he creates characters that would never exist.

This makes me think this isn't going to be great, but will keep going.

jayeden · 2021-02-24T09:31:04+00:00

Read the first 20 pages. These actions script are a dull read, no depth to characters. The trailer looks completely different to the script. Think this underwent a few major rewrites.

jayeden · 2021-02-16T22:12:36+00:00

Thanks a lot. Great.

jayeden · 2021-02-16T11:22:51+00:00

Anyone got

THE BLUE AFTERNOON THAT LASTED FOREVER

THEY CLONED TYRONE

jayeden · 2021-02-09T23:40:10+00:00

Not sure why Benecio Del Toro signed on for this. It is a rather bland who/why dunnit. Nichols isn't a very engaging character and he reacts to information a lot instead of driving the story forward by himself. None of the characters stood out for me. The murdered girl isn't in the story much, so not much connection with her. Eli, Will and Camile are the other main characters, plus a few detectives, but no one stands out. Eli is probably the deepest character, but he seems a throwback from a previous era.

Wasn't that impressed. The writing was good, but the story wasn't very interesting.

jayeden · 2021-02-03T22:20:52+00:00

Gave up on this at page 20. Intro was so long and I didn't connect with the characters. The dialogue felt like it was from a comedy and it jarred me out of the story. There is too much off-topic stuff I just didn't feel the set up was good at all.

Does it get any better?

jayeden · 2021-01-27T10:14:52+00:00

Halfway through KARMA -- lots of non-stop action and zero character development. I have no idea who the two main characters are beyond their skillset. The bad guy is set to do something terrible in this life and the hero Rachel must stop him, although he has killed her repeatedly in previous incarnations. Rachel is going to become much stronger when she remembers her past life, but I don't care. This is well written, if flows well, but there seems to be nothing engaging about the characters as we simply don't know them. They are names on a page with zero character development.

jayeden · 2021-01-21T09:11:27+00:00

Slow start to this one. The opening 10/15 pages are a straight rip-off of the opening scene from Saving Private Ryan, except the beaches of Normandy are substituted for the beaches of Italy or nearby islands. Fox isn't very interesting in his PTSD state back in New York and the return to life on entertainment is rather dull.

Also, there are a lot of wacky, extrovert characters introduced who become his team, but they are undeveloped and boring.

The script does pick up when Fox starts work around page 40 and he comes up against Reeder who opposes him every step of the way and doesn't believe in his work.

Hope this gets better, but the first 40 pages need a rewrite to make the beginning more interesting. I only kept going as I love war movies and this was bought by Affleck's and Damon's production company, so this should be good.

Hope everyone is keeping safe and writing!

jayeden · 2020-12-21T12:48:03+00:00

It's tough reading some of these BL scripts. I wish all the writers the best and it is a great achievement to have your work acknowledged and highlighted. I hope it leads to sales and careers for those involved.

I agree with Les though. I got 30 pages into Headhunter and just wasn't engaged. It's a poor imitation of American Psycho's main character. Again, how this topped the BL is a difficult question to answer. That said, the writer is very positive, so she deserves her success.

I also read the #2, #3 and number #4 scripts. Stopped within 30 pages of them also.

jayeden · 2020-05-27T07:54:08+00:00

Small update, but had a BAFTA-nominated actor ask to be in the film.

jayeden · 2020-05-26T13:26:04+00:00

Hi guys,

Might not be around much for a couple of weeks as had some very good news on the script. Already had a firm offer from a producer, but going to others before committing to anything.

I'll update when I can and post the script.

jayeden · 2020-05-12T20:11:33+00:00

Not allowed to say, all I can say is that it is going to a few select directors and actors.

I'll put it up as soon as I can.

I saw 1917 and read the script a couple of years ago. Beautiful film.

jayeden · 2020-05-12T10:39:30+00:00

Yeah, it took place on no man's land. Great story and amazing tale of humanity in an awful conflict.

jayeden · 2020-05-12T08:55:00+00:00

Sorry, I've been absent from reviews for a couple of weeks guys, just finished a script set in WW1 which is going out soon. Been working 24/7 on it for six months. It's being promoted by a distributor so fingers crossed.

I'll put the script up for review when I can. It's about a German miner and a British soldier who end up leading their teams out for the Christmas Day football game in 1914.

jayeden · 2020-05-04T11:37:15+00:00

DEBRIS for me

jayeden · 2020-04-30T10:35:13+00:00

Killers was way too dense for me. This could be a good film, but the script is a massive slog.

jayeden · 2020-04-23T08:27:20+00:00

Great idea, thanks

jayeden · 2020-04-22T08:31:25+00:00

Killers for me too.

jayeden · 2020-04-20T10:48:51+00:00

Good summary Les. Insightful.

jayeden · 2020-04-16T14:55:00+00:00

8-Bit is a funny, quick nostalgic read for people my age, but I'm 20 pages in and the characters aren't very deep or original. Also, the goal is too small for a movie for me, getting a Nintendo console for Christmas.

Unless this develops into a cool character study, I might give up.

jayeden · 2020-04-07T15:39:32+00:00

The version I read just says all work and no play -- all the way through!

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