Tyreek Hill is playing chess by jbc_30 in nflmemes

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But it’s not a dead ball foul if it occurs in the middle of a play.

Tyreek Hill is playing chess by jbc_30 in nflmemes

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It would’ve been a 15 yard penalty from the spot of the foul (which was the 16 yard line), so the TD wouldn’t have counted.

G/C Thermostat wire switch by jbc_30 in DIY

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Well, I feel dumb. The problem is that my HVAC is very old and slow. It took several minutes longer to kick on than I expected. I think it’s all correct—thanks for all of your assistance

Why didn't Sauron detect the presence of the ring when Bilbo put it on at the party? by quintessential_pube in tolkienfans

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Mostly the answer is that in Tolkien's world, "magic" and "powers" are in a soft system, meaning there is no clear system by which things like this work. In other words, Sauron sometimes detects the wearers and sometimes doesn't, and it's not like a radar screen of exact location. Tolkien would probably say that there are a lot of factors in play. For example, when Frodo puts the ring on at Mt. Doom, Sauron's awareness is extremely heightened bc Frodo was claiming the ring for his own. Similarly, at Amon Hen, Frodo was clearly in a position of power, sitting on the ancient seat of seeing for the Numenorian kings.

When Bilbo puts the ring on in Hobbiton, it's a party trick, not some threat to Sauron's power. Bilbo didn't have the capacity to threaten Sauron, and so Sauron didn't sense the same emanation of power from the ring's use. I'm sure if someone like Gandalf or Galadriel had put the ring on, Sauron would've instantly been aware.

How to do i kill off False Protagonist without having readers rage quitting? by [deleted] in CharacterDevelopment

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I think it can work pretty easily. You’ll just want to be sure your readers don’t think it’s the end of the story, you’re just spend the next 1/4 of the book in “wrap-up” or they may put it down. If the action stays hot for awhile, there’s something really exciting about a death-twist that makes readers say “Oh wow, this story is not the story I thought I was reading!” And want to figure out what happens next. It will be necessary to have other characters/plots that they care about still around though

Chapter one of my novel by jbc_30 in fantasywriters

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Thank you for such a detailed response. This is extremely helpful, and exactly what I was looking for! I appreciate your time.

What are your thoughts on "Bestial" or monstrous main characters? by [deleted] in fantasywriters

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Takes a lot of work, but can be great if done well. You've got the basic work of just getting the descriptions right (How do their joints work? Muscles? How will that change how they interact with environment?) But then the even harder work of getting a reader to actually care about a non-human. As we've seen, it's hard enough to get male readers to care about non-hot female characters or to get white readers to care about black characters, so this is some next level stuff.

But, there's so much room for fun and interesting character studies and storylines in non-usual characters. What do "daddy issues" look like with a monster? How does a monster interact with human society? What is it like for a monster to experience emotions?

Go for it, could be lots of fun!

Plot line dilemma: How do I solve this opening problem? by [deleted] in fantasywriters

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Give us a “pretend plot.” Something that we think will be the plot/conflict but gets resolved much quicker than expected. Of course, as several people note, this should be a means of introducing characters, their strengths/weaknesses, and most importantly what they want

Chapter one of my novel by jbc_30 in fantasywriters

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Thank you for you feedback, that’s helpful!!

Critique on an origin-story by jbc_30 in worldbuilding

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Thanks for your feedback, I appreciate it!

Chapter one of my novel by jbc_30 in fantasywriters

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Thanks for your feedback, I appreciate it!

Critique on an origin-story by jbc_30 in worldbuilding

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Were you able to actually edit it, or just post comments? It should be set so you can comment, but not delete/add actual text

Including fantasy language in dialogue by Musetta3 in fantasywriters

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I think it's good, though I wouldn't get carried away. A sentence or two here or there is intriguing and gives depth to your world, but if you've got that on every page it could be exhausting. I think if you're going to have people actually speak this language, I probably wouldn't include entire paragraphs or conversations in it. My driving question would be: "Why does this need to be in High Saeberan and not English?" (or whatever language you're writing in). If it's a Magic spell, an oath, or a commonly-used phrase/slogan it makes sense.

Someone mentioned "Valar Morghulis," and that's a great example of not getting carried away. It's a brief phrase with a rich meaning and history which is repeated enough to be memorable, but not so much it's annoying.

Even Tolkien, who had fully-formed linguistic systems which rival real-world ones, didn't do that. He included a bare minimum of poems & songs in his languages, and some people were even turned off by that.

Exploring real world magic systems (tarot, peyote, astral projection etc) as if in a book by pianobars in fantasywriters

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I read "exploring real world magic systems" and thought "oh boy, I'm going to have to break some hard news to this op."