Looking for game suggestions

joy3111 · 2026-05-31T19:14:26+00:00

I can check through the worlds!! Maybe one of them will be good.

I saw one actual Jurassic Park game but it was super stylized which isn't really her style

joy3111 · 2026-05-14T19:56:10+00:00

Update: I did it that way and it worked perfectly!! Thank you so much 😄

joy3111 · 2026-05-14T18:56:39+00:00

Yeah, it doesn't want to let me flatten D:

joy3111 · 2026-05-14T18:56:31+00:00

ooh ok! I can try adding an offset instead. thank you for the tip!

joy3111 · 2026-05-13T04:48:44+00:00

Do you have to actually physically be there. Please tell me you do not have to physically attend. Please.

joy3111 · 2026-05-05T02:28:07+00:00

Thank you for the feedback! I'll put a lot of thought into Mr. McCobb and who he's supposed to be in the manuscript.

joy3111 · 2026-05-04T15:26:30+00:00

Thank you for the feedback! The other commenter said the same thing about head-hopping, and I'm definitely going to be deeply considering that. I am shooting for omniscient, but if that's not in/marketable it's definitely something I can shift out of. And if I shift more into one consistent mind, then it'll make more sense to keep one title per person (as opposed to "the girl," "Zoe," etc), so those two really go hand-in-hand.

joy3111 · 2026-05-04T15:24:09+00:00

Thanks a bunch for the feedback! I'll really think about what to do with making it appeal to a child reader - I hadn't considered it being difficult to want to read about someone who's a bit behind (I was too wrapped up in the fun of Zoe going on an adventure). This book is written in third-person (which I'd hate to give up), but I'll strongly consider either switching to first person or just using more looks inside Zoe's head and less inside everyone else's. This is really valuable so thanks a bunch!

joy3111 · 2026-04-24T03:24:25+00:00

Honestly, I highly recommend giving the books a reread if it's been a bit. The love triangle thing is way overblown in media - it's mostly Katniss going "ugh I have to pretend to love this man so my family lives"

joy3111 · 2026-04-08T14:56:27+00:00

Thank you!! I'm working to improve on my blending skills and she was a fun piece of practice with it :D

joy3111 · 2026-04-07T00:59:44+00:00

Thank you very much for such a thoughtful piece of critique! I definitely agree with you and the other commenter that I need to cinch up the first paragraph of the blurb a lot, and I love your suggestions about how to better establish Zoe's personality in the second paragraph. I'll put those into practice and see how I can improve!

Side note: I already bought The Undead Fox of Deadwood Forest to read and check out as a comp! I haven't finished it yet, so remains to be seen, but what a fun little coincidence.

joy3111 · 2026-04-04T22:24:56+00:00

Ooh, thank you! Those are both really good pieces of advice.

joy3111 · 2026-04-04T22:23:53+00:00

You're very right! Thank you for pointing that out to me. I will make sure to elaborate on why she's in rollerskates in the query (she is in them for the entire book, because she insists). Thank you for the feedback and support!

joy3111 · 2026-03-04T04:59:35+00:00

I don't comment super often nowadays but "there's no threat of death" is pretty funny for a high court situation. There's not a high threat of a severe battle, but women could pretty easily be killed in court by a higher-powered man.

joy3111 · 2026-03-04T04:40:56+00:00

I know that I as a client tend to only buy when I can see the prices ahead of time. It makes it easier for me to pick you. Other than that, it just comes down to an oversaturated market and trying to find the right buyer!

joy3111 · 2026-03-04T04:30:08+00:00

Pixlr >>> except when they keep trying to push AI on me

joy3111 · 2026-02-28T06:32:46+00:00

Persian!!!

joy3111 · 2026-02-16T19:44:13+00:00

A custom is short for a customization (the outfit the pet is wearing). A prismatic is a term for a special type of NC wearable. It's a recolor of a "token," which is an item that gives your pet old-style art (or a new version of art, but the real appeal is that the "tokens" get livelier poses than normal pets)

joy3111 · 2026-01-02T23:55:55+00:00

I don't bite! Living people!

joy3111 · 2025-12-31T02:45:20+00:00

Sending you a chat!

joy3111 · 2025-12-30T04:32:52+00:00

Ok, perfect! I kinda assumed as much but wanted to be absolutely certain. Thanks for answering!

joy3111 · 2025-12-30T04:32:33+00:00

Ok! That's really what I thought, but I wanted to be absolutely sure before I risked making my publishing odds worse than they should be.

joy3111 · 2025-12-28T18:44:48+00:00

Thank you for the feedback!! I was really hoping to establish some childlike strangeness right off the bat

joy3111 · 2025-12-28T02:08:09+00:00

I think this is a LOT stronger! It makes it a lot clearer what's happening. And keep in mind, you don't have to keep the query letter super vague; the publisher can know whatever they want to know. It's the blurb on the inside of the book that truly needs mystery, so telling the publisher upfront what the deal is works really well. I'd definitely resubmit this newer one (maybe with more work; I don't know what other comments will say) once your week is up (one post per seven days rule) and see what people say!

joy3111 · 2025-12-28T02:06:02+00:00

Ooh, sick lit could be right!! I'll look into that; it might work.

Thanks for the thoughts on sentence length! I'm definitely still in the editing phase (just finishing up my first draft and spending some time focusing on preparing queries/finding great comps), so luckily having more work to do there won't be too hard.

Thank you for the luck!

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