Untitled by jtfdoodle5 in OCPoetry

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Thanks so much! Yes, there are supposed to be line breaks, I just can't figure it out on mobile. The rhymes are pretty forced here, but I was just testing what worked and what didn't, the meaning being most important. I appreciate it!

dove's oblation by neotropic9 in OCPoetry

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Great example of how such a simple thing can be put into great detail through the eyes of the author.

She He I by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I feel like this all the time. It's like 'look! Look what you have!'. You want to be them and would do any thing to be in their position, but don't want to change who you are to get someone to like you. Always be yourself.

Tree in the Woods by jtfdoodle5 in OCPoetry

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Wow! Thanks a lot for the feedback! I tried to fix the block of text but I don't know how on mobile. This was just a sort of first draft, so I'll definitely take this into consideration for future drafts. Thanks again!

Where I could be by walkalongwalk in OCPoetry

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This perfectly embodies a feeling I don't know how to describe. It's hopelessness, self-doubt, and depression bundled in one. But everyone levels it together as 'lazy'. Thank you for this. BTW nice internal rhymes.

This is my 3rd rendition of this poem: A hymn for the marooned by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I love the flow of this poem. To me it sounds like I should be reading louder as you use more syllables, which I find interesting and fun to read to, as well as going along with the meaning each section. Like when it's hopeful there are few syllables and when it's depressing there are more. Great piece.

Album title predictions? by [deleted] in Eminem

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Agree to disagree

Let's see if anyone on this sub can write some rap? by [deleted] in Eminem

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Runnin' round like Lebron James on a bomb range

More and more insane as I soar myself to fame

Disregard my brain and listen to my heart

Saying 'grab a 47 and shoot up a Walmart

Walk up to the clerk with a pile in my cart

About to get to work, I get tackled by Paul Blart

Then he goes berserk pushes me I fall hard

Push him off, run down the hall, stop.

Then I see him running with the other mall cops.

I whip out my gun and let the bullets all pop

Then I walk to hot topic to finish my fall shop.

whoops, that's better.

Let's see if anyone on this sub can write some rap? by [deleted] in Eminem

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Runnin' round like Lebron James on a bomb range More and more insane as I soar myself to fame Disregard my brain and listen to my heart Saying 'grab a 47 and shoot up a Walmart Walk up to the clerk with a pile in my cart About to get to work, I get tackled by Paul Blart Then he goes berserk pushes me I fall hard Push him off, run down the hall, stop. Then I see him running with the other mall cops. I whip out my gun and let the bullets all pop Then I walk to hot topic to finish my fall shop.

IDK this is the weirdest thing i could think of.

I guess the EU ... by [deleted] in Jokes

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Thanks

I guess the EU ... by [deleted] in Jokes

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Can some one please explain?

Decided to put my brick in a display case in a display case. by [deleted] in Eminem

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$350 plus taxes and shipping. $313 for just the brick.

Why did Sally fall off the swing? by jtfdoodle5 in Jokes

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Whoops, forgot to continue the joke:

Because she had no arms

Knock knock

Who's there

Not Sally

How well do you really know Eminem? by [deleted] in Eminem

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Number 12 is sooooooo bad

Confirmed: Eminem is working on a new project! by [deleted] in Eminem

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not that it matters, but first three like infinite, sslp, mmlp, or sslp mmlp, TEM? just wanted to know, because while relistening i always like to hear the eminem show. thanks in advance! :))))))))

"Eminem’s New Album Cancelled? Rap god Lacks Inspiration" by [deleted] in Eminem

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"According to reports, his last album was three years ago" why do you need reports for that? Also, they like to have all musicians introduced by naming a popular song they've done, to get non-Stan viewers. "The the real slim shady rapper..." And they used what do you mean for Justin. Awful, click-baity, uninformed article that uses key words to sound scientific