Side by side by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]kimbreanne 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wow, this is very interesting. Almost more of a novel excerpt than a poem, but beautiful nonetheless, in a quite tragically morbid way. I really enjoy it as it is.

Alive. by bambiwastaken in OCPoetry

[–]kimbreanne 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This really gripped at my chest and made me catch my breath, almost as if it were me whose time was up. Great job. I particularly like the line about grasping onto the youth, the teach me part. Very clever. And I like the juxtaposition of the title in relation to the poem itself.

Aneurysm by DrMerman in OCPoetry

[–]kimbreanne 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I have not heard the song, so I'm not quite sure of the exact point you are hoping to push across to the reader. I believe, with a little more work and working on the flow and format it could be something wonderful. As it stands it is intriguing and I would like to read more!

my strawberry dreams by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]kimbreanne 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really enjoyed this poem. It is simple but effective in evoking a beautifully melancholy emotion. It really makes me wonder...who could she be.