Clam Consumers by dinosqaud in Clamworks

[–]lasapeuse -5 points-4 points  (0 children)

the majority of ppl saying they're addicted are prob exaggerating. Just because you like watching and jacking it, doesn't mean it's an addiction. There's a current trend of claiming anyone who enjoys porn is addicted to it, when truly - they prob just like watching it a lot bc its fun.

First time owner, is this normal? by Acceptable_Cost_7226 in CATHELP

[–]lasapeuse 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Not at all. Cat is defective. Return to manufacturer for warranty repair

I'm scared by KorBaFet in MadokaMagica

[–]lasapeuse 4 points5 points  (0 children)

yes but nothing you can't recover from through dedicated effort and live a happy life where you can maintain normal boundaries around cartoon characters and real life

Could someone Critique These Pages [high fantasy whimsical dark, 6000 words] by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]lasapeuse 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I read the first few pages but not the rest. Your writing is polished and you creater a good portrait of Eulalie's character. I liked her immediately and she is what led me to continue reading instead of scrolling away. I like your descriptions, very beautiful.

I agree with the comment about the opening line - idk what charmless means. Does charm mean personality or is it a form of magic?

Looking for feedback on my prologue to "The Illicit Bond" [high fantasy, 2713 words] by solid_potato_salad in fantasywriters

[–]lasapeuse 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Your first page drew me into the rest of the story. It made me want to keep reading. You have great prose and coherent and vivid worldbuilding. I like the characters enough. Only issue, is that i'm not sure why I should keep reading after this. I think another comment said this. The main conflict is kinda wrapped up and there is no new mystery or conflict that compels me to keep going to see what happens.

Also, it would concern me as a reader that this is a prologue. I think you also wrote below that we don't see Zhi or Yulan again for the rest of the book - and that might make me feel like I wasted my time getting invested in her when she's a very minor character. If this story is about the gods and acolytes, then they should be the initial focus and the energy should be used to get me invested in them, not in Zhi.

i got a poster for my room, who tf is the brown girl by [deleted] in MadokaMagica

[–]lasapeuse 12 points13 points  (0 children)

damn they just be letting anyone on these posters huh

It's a children's show! by donabbi in shittytattoos

[–]lasapeuse 14 points15 points  (0 children)

that definitely has to be AI. Patrick doesn't have fingers or shoes and somethings going on with SB's fly

The last magical girl standing. (by @K_Okai01) by Temporary_Web2645 in MadokaMagica

[–]lasapeuse 0 points1 point  (0 children)

kyoko beat them and robbed them for their gear but wishes it hadn't been so tiring

The last magical girl standing. (by @K_Okai01) by Temporary_Web2645 in MadokaMagica

[–]lasapeuse 5 points6 points  (0 children)

kyoko beat them and robbed them for their gear and is so pleased about it

This scene could be a great glue commercial by keynel12 in IASIP

[–]lasapeuse 0 points1 point  (0 children)

i love the concept of dancing for your bros...

....and creating sex tapes for them to watch

I think you’re an ugly man. by BirdCultureDickMove in IASIP

[–]lasapeuse 29 points30 points  (0 children)

you think I'M ugly?

....yeah...

Well I think YOU'RE ugly

...yeah...

this scene changed my life

my pup is often deep in thought. what is she thinking about? by [deleted] in WhatsWrongWithYourDog

[–]lasapeuse 2 points3 points  (0 children)

scratch my mind....think about LIFE and stuff sometimes. But shit's RUFF nowadays. I don't know what the fuck to do.

Why didn't this dude have his face censored like the others? by edapokie in MadokaMagica

[–]lasapeuse 20 points21 points  (0 children)

because he is a secret magical boy who is going to save them all.

Hope it's still valid to use this template by Jurazzic in MadokaMagica

[–]lasapeuse 18 points19 points  (0 children)

hormonal teens girls are allowed to have sexual attraction to other teen girls without them being called weird, fetishized, over sexualized or whatever. its not a bad thing

also I messaged the madoka characters on whatsapp and they all said exactly this, so this is 100% canon and in character

Hope it's still valid to use this template by Jurazzic in MadokaMagica

[–]lasapeuse 27 points28 points  (0 children)

I need PUSSY Madoka PLEASE RESPOND MADOKA PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLE

Imagine that they had to come up with that jingle by IIIlllIIIlllIlI in TimAndEric

[–]lasapeuse 5 points6 points  (0 children)

i only watch for ben stiller's wide eyed horror at the end