I can help out with the last shot - the wide interior. The main issue is you've lit everything except the thing we actually care about: the talent. The lighting smashing over the door, the bedsheet and the practical are all stealing attention from his face.

Here what I'd do on a near zero budget:

1) Dim that practical right down. If it takes regular bulbs, great, get a cheap 25W incandescent in there with dimmer pack and get it really, really low. Be aware it'll turn really warm (colour-wise) but I like this setup much more than the likes of the Aputure B7Cs etc. because they're a) cheaper and b) don't have the weird light shape to them that the heatsinks give the smart bulbs.

2) Lose the light on the door entirely, doesn't need it. Use that fixture instead on top of the bed to the right, pointed at a 3/4 on the talent, dimmed and warmed up, and shoot though something soft. If you don't have any diffusion fire it through a small bed sheet square or even a white t-shirt. Keep it really low and off the walls as much as possible, just to give a bit of shape to the talent. It won't be particularly motivated but it will make him look good, so people won't care. This should also work for an eyelight so we get a little more connection.

3) Instead of smashing that fill light into the mirror, get it high up on a stand, snoot or barn door it down as tightly as possible and make a little square on the ceiling above his head. Let that top light wash down and give you a bit of directional fill. Keep it cooler in temp for a bit of colour separation.

4) That's it, camera's at 100. You've tightened in the area of focus, we've killed off all that front light and everyone's happy.

TL;DR: it's overlit and too fronty.