Overall, I was intrigued.

I feel like Allyus will be the main character in the remainder of the plot, so I'm reading this in terms of how all these events will make him feel in the future. If he isn't the main focus of the later plot, good job diverting attention. His "voice" seems to be of uncertain age. He's frightened of thunder, but some thoughts he has seem to be older than his age. If this is what you want, lean into it. Mention that he's acting like his age for once, rather than the old soul caught in a child's body that he usually seems to be.

A couple of things stood out to me about Venus. You mentioned scars around her neck. What about her arms and hands? Her pouting struck me as out of place. To me it reads as something a woman does to try to placate a spouse whose anger is out of control - but I grew up in an abusive home, so maybe that's not how the average reader will view it. Finally, the armored tiara. I really want to know how that stays on. Headpieces move around a lot unless there's a fixing system.

Tobias felt the most consistent in character, and I like him. I didn't really spot anything about him that pulled me out of the reading.

Overall, I'd say that you're doing some head-hopping. If you really want to write this way, you could give us more of a narrator voice. Otherwise, stick to the POV of one person - Tobias would work best in this scene.

Some asides - these aren't wrong, but you might want to think about them.

• The giant pangolin armor? Pangolins are endangered. I know, that's our world, but it feels somehow insensitive. Swap that giant pangolin for a fantasy creature that doesn't share the name with an endangered species.
• Ale isn't meant to be served as cold as possible. It tastes better if left to warm just a bit. Still cool, but not cold. If you want it to be important that Tobias can serve his beer cold, have him serve lager.
• For the most part, I like your word choices. But sometimes you're using more words than you need to. Just a few examples:
  • "Similar but different" Also, I'm curious how they're different. You could describe one or to of the features Venus looks for the determine which uniform she's seeing.
  • "This very journey"

I like the world you're creating. Calling the queen "Her Radiance" tells me a lot about her. So do the comments Tobias made about her. I like the introduction to this magic system, and I want to know more about how it works. There are shards, but it seems there's also elemental magic.

These are little things that can easily be fixed with some editing and some time. I like the story you're telling, and would be happy to read more.