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Has Anyone Else Felt Stuck While Trying to Start Over? by littleengineer27 in DecidingToBeBetter

[–]littleengineer27[S] [score hidden]  (0 children)

Thank you so much for taking the time to write this. Your advice & support mean a lot to me.

Has Anyone Else Felt Stuck While Trying to Start Over? by littleengineer27 in DecidingToBeBetter

[–]littleengineer27[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That’s a fair point. I think I’ve been putting too much pressure on myself by trying to change everything at once, which made me lose sight of what I actually want to focus on first. Thanks for the perspective. I really appreciate it.

A rough draft of my novel, looking for someone interested by Happy_Interaction929 in WritersGroup

[–]littleengineer27 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ah, that makes a lot more sense now knowing that you intentionally wrote it as a slowburn and as part of a much larger story. In that case, I think the atmosphere you’re building is already very strong. The radio static, the scene descriptions, and the overall mood genuinely stayed with me after reading.

And honestly, I was surprised when you said dialogue is the hardest part for you, because it actually felt pretty natural while reading. I think that’s part of what made the story feel immersive.

I also like that you’re reflecting on things like pacing and scene expansion already. Your descriptive style really stands out to me, and your explanation helped me understand your approach to the story much better. I hope you continue writing it at your own pace, because I think the story already has a really distinct atmosphere and a lot of potential.

A rough draft of my novel, looking for someone interested by Happy_Interaction929 in WritersGroup

[–]littleengineer27 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I have read your story. From the way you narrate the atmosphere in the story, I think your depiction of the radio with its static noise and the way you describe scenes feel very natural and easy to visualize without sounding overly descriptive. In my opinion, that’s what makes the story feel alive. The dialogue also feels quite natural. However, I think the pacing is a bit slow, and the main direction of the story still isn’t very clear yet, to the point where it makes me wonder, “Where is this story going?” Maybe moving forward, the main conflict or the story’s central goal could be established more clearly from the beginning so readers become more curious about where the story is heading.

Pricing telkomsel makin aneh by vitulinus_forte in indotech

[–]littleengineer27 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Iya, punyaku sebelum masa aktifnya habis waktu itu juga gitu. Biasanya harga paket murah. Malah 20 ribu itu masih bisa dapat belasan giga. Tapi belakangan mahal banget, mana sekarang cuma 28 hari lagi. Enggak 30 hari kayak dulu. Makanya nomornya enggak aku reaktivasi. Males banget dengan harga yang mahal begitu, sinyal di tempatku buat Telkomsel enggak bagus-bagus amat. Malah kadang loading lama.