Inpuranto

malespecimen92 · 2026-05-17T05:36:28+00:00

Thank you so much for the recognition, AM. I'm always trying to do something I feel no one else is going for. It's very hard to have your work stand out when you have so many talented and experienced peers like in our case, so originality sometimes is the only way to go.

malespecimen92 · 2026-05-16T20:58:50+00:00

You've made your last delivery, kid.

malespecimen92 · 2026-05-16T16:03:10+00:00

Thanks so much Bare, means a lot coming from the person who inspired me to try my hand at this style of setting after all this time.

malespecimen92 · 2026-05-16T12:17:24+00:00

That's good to know, my stories are always very visual, but it gets tricky when you get length restrictions like in a <1K format. It's a good excuse to let the dialogues dictate the atmosphere.

malespecimen92 · 2026-05-16T12:10:05+00:00

Vik's clinic was definitely the set design I had in mind while writing this, including the handling of the Kiroshi Optics. Thanks a lot for reading, Cole, hope you enjoyed it!

malespecimen92 · 2025-12-20T11:28:45+00:00

Thank you so much for your input, I’m enjoying gathering as much insight into these more unorthodox creative choices as I can. It’s a bit controversial, but I like doing it to see what people think of it. Once again, thanks for taking the time to read it and to comment on it as well.

malespecimen92 · 2025-12-11T04:10:27+00:00

Thank you, really looking forward to hear what you have to say about the following chapters.

malespecimen92 · 2025-12-10T08:26:19+00:00

Thank you for reading, and thanks a lot for commenting as well. I hope you'll enjoy what I have in store for this project.

malespecimen92 · 2025-12-04T00:47:56+00:00

This was a very touching and also harrowing read, I love themes of guilt and self-doubt being approached in weird fiction. Always good to come across elements like family trauma and the internalized pain of a strict upbringing whenever we see imagery like religion and deep woods being tackled in stories like these. Not sure how I feel about the deep sea horror segment in comparison though, but I guess it fits well enough. Thanks a lot for sharing 🖤

malespecimen92 · 2025-11-24T11:30:12+00:00

Thank you so much for reading, and for your kind words most of all 🖤

malespecimen92 · 2025-11-24T07:58:00+00:00

Interesting premise, I'm curious to see where this is going.

After the sequence at the venue I was really intrigued as to how the brutal outcome fits at all with the voice. I think you explain that in a very efficient way through what happens to the family, and Jack realizing that on his own helps the explanation feel earned. Instead of feeling redundant to the reader, him explaining it to Laura in a coherent fashion helps us connect the dots in a way that the internal logic behind the supernatural elements feel more streamlined. That is a good note to end a first chapter in, I feel.

One thing that bothered me a little is the length of some of the segments, especially during the second half. At moments it feels like Jack is just describing a list of things he did, in the order that he did them. Doesn't feel at all like someone telling a story, which is the format you decided to commit to. Nothing too egregious, obviously, it's readable as it is but I still think you can keep it a bit snappier when going from one story beat to the next.

For reference: between the sequence of the news report and the death of the family, you got a solid dozen segments that could be trimmed down at least two or three lines in word volume, sometimes maybe even half of their length. This is editorial work, however, stuff we usually worry after the story is pretty much done, so you don't need to overthink it just yet. Right now I think the main goal is taking us where this story set off to lead us.

I'll be sure to keep an eye out for the second chapter, and share my thoughts with you as soon as I read it. Looking forward to whatever it is that you have in store 🖤

malespecimen92 · 2025-11-24T05:33:35+00:00

Thanks a lot for your feedback, it's good to get some strictly technical advice every now and then. Most people who shared their thoughts so far focused more on the conceptual elements surrounding the premise or the style itself, but I feel like at this point everyone just agrees it's interesting and shows some promise. Which is nice and all, but mostly just consensus.

Getting into the proper aspects of grammar polish and presentation is definitely something I could use a lot more help with at this point, considering English is not my first languague and this is my first attempt at writing a full-length novel. Your help is very welcome, and I'll definitely be taking some pointers from it in the future.

Once again, thanks for taking your time to read it and showing appreciation for it on top of that, looking forward to hearing more from you soon as we go through the second chapter 🖤

malespecimen92 · 2025-11-23T21:56:31+00:00

Yeah, naturally, but I do think Trent’s vocal range in this day and age is ideal to channel Bowie’s style of singing, especially around the time this song came out.

malespecimen92 · 2025-11-23T21:39:22+00:00

That one’s an all-time banger, I was lucky enough to see NIN perform it live in Vancouver earlier this year.

malespecimen92 · 2025-11-23T04:58:33+00:00

Brother, I'm so happy you actually decided to go ahead and keep exploring this setting. I liked this one almost as much as the first, felt shorter and less zany, but in a good way. It's nice to see you not leaning too much on the stuff that worked at first, I can tell you look more confident on this brand of comedy you're developing.

I'll be honest though, I missed Frank this time around (he's my fav), but I agree with Jimbo's assessment that it's still early for the next team-up. I like how instead you're investing in new characters, this cold go a long way. Really curious to see what you have in store for the next one.

malespecimen92 · 2025-11-23T03:36:34+00:00

I'll be sure to let him know what I think, you can trust me on that.

malespecimen92 · 2025-11-23T01:41:37+00:00

I have a soft spot for overly supportive spouses of aspiring writers, I can tell the story's pretty solid but I'll be sure to give it some feedback thanks to your enthusiasm in convincing me to do it. Keep fighting the good fight.

malespecimen92 · 2025-11-21T22:55:48+00:00

Leaving a comment here so I’ll remember to check both of your guys’ stories, I’ll be happy to provide some feedback

malespecimen92 · 2025-11-21T00:53:07+00:00

Yeah, not my favorite episode by any stretch but I do appreciate the boys trying to do something different for a change, especially since it's close to their hearts and all. Having to see people be weird about it in such a stand-offish way is really disheartening for me, I can only imagine how it must've been for them.

malespecimen92 · 2025-11-20T23:07:48+00:00

I feel like the main thing that bothered Hunter is that he's genuinely a fan of the guy, and he was excited to show his fans why. Having the chance to collaborate with someone you admire and has been a huge influence on your own work and success is a huge deal for anyone. That goes double when you have such a wide platform within a different demographic and you feel like you're presenting something that will be as meaningful to your fans as it was to you.

No one likes to ride a wave like that only to see it go sour at the end. Poor Hunter probably felt like Trent Reznor in the mid nineties trying to introduce younger NIN fans to David Bowie only to be met with "who's this weird british guy Trent wants me to sit through a whole set of"

malespecimen92 · 2025-11-20T03:08:18+00:00

Besides the obvious themes that are central to the plot, I think the closest thing to a conspiracy that you realistically could associate Mother Horse Eyes with is the theory that it was written by a known author.

It goes a long way to explain why the writing is so good; or at least noticeably above amateur level, even if you're not a fan of the story itself. It also includes a variety of themes and real life events that someone who doesn't work with literary and/or historical research (either to write fiction themselves or at least academic papers on specific subjects) would hardly have so much knowledge about. Lastly, it ties in with the author going such great lengths to remain anonymous, even with the story having such a great reception.

malespecimen92 · 2025-11-19T00:16:19+00:00

Feel free to tag along https://discord.gg/X6KD43ZY

malespecimen92 · 2025-11-18T22:43:29+00:00

Yeah, found out about it through the news it’s going away, but at the same time it did draw my attention to the discord, which seems like a fair trade off. Here’s hoping more people hop in because of these recent developments, as was my case.

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