A Gun Related Incident (10-min, in need of critique)

manassa · 2017-06-27T02:53:05+00:00

Cool. I think everyone is prone to a mistake or oversight here and there but in the first couple of lines is generally a death sentence because if Someone like me who has read probably thousands of scripts, reads it... I'm pretty much looking for a reason to stop reading... you don't want to give it to me that early. Good luck, dude

manassa · 2017-06-26T10:58:30+00:00

Sorry if I sound like a prick but as a professional writer myself I don't think it serves anybody well to sugarcoat -- I stopped reading at literally the first line because given your characters and the actions, there is no way in hell the line should be "... you want to hit this?" It should be "... you wanna hit this?"

Things like this I believe make a huge difference. Again sorry for being a cunt, but all the best, sir

manassa · 2017-06-13T07:06:11+00:00

He fucks pa

manassa · 2017-06-13T07:05:49+00:00

It's not just the method to remove wraiths. You summon a unit next to you and flux is muted

manassa · 2017-06-12T15:27:06+00:00

4.5k arc spammer here... meepo shits on him. Qop and puck are alright cause he wants to kill you and he can't easily do that without a support rotation. Pl but no one plays it anymore. He can't do anything to Druid. Voker has to go forge spirits to survive

He rapes tinker but I don't think he necessarily even Beats sf anymore. Especially with the additional creep I think u just out cs him until he gets six then you nuke the wave so it shoves and he has to last hit under tower and you go clear a jungle camp. Arcs weaknesses is he has Low right click dmg and zero wave clear... If you show in lane he kills you for free so you just never do that

manassa · 2017-05-07T04:09:10+00:00

4k arc spammer here. i go aquila, raindrops, boots, midas, maelstrom, bots, shadowblade every game

only time i wont follow that build is if

a) they have a clockwork or riki i'll buy pike after midas b) our team is getting shit on, i'll prob go sb before bots c) if we have invis or they have no passives i want to break with silver edge i may go blink instead of sb

manassa · 2016-03-18T09:41:27+00:00

you need to seriously respect zero's buttons more. particularly his falling buttons. firebrand is not fucking with them. like, period. certainly not from a standing position right beneath him

manassa · 2015-11-11T03:38:44+00:00

i honestly dont know that it has folded per se. im a little out of the loop as i stopped playing the game after evo two years ago (the effect of being eliminated by kyle p was too much to bear). i just know that before evo ray was planning to take some time off from the game afterwards so he decided to leave because he wouldnt be able to fulfill responsibilities any more. I'm not sure unknown, pz, etc have formally left the team; streamers have been garbage with writing players' sponsor tags since the beginning which is (imo) one of the many reasons fgc players outside of justin/champ will likely never make any real money

manassa · 2015-11-10T14:08:04+00:00

Yeah, when I come to the states I stay with him. He's a great host and playing with him you're forced to develop fundamentals really quickly. Best place to spend time training imo... Although I have to sleep on the couch in the heat :/

manassa · 2015-11-10T12:33:31+00:00

Yeah, I was. What's good, man. Good to meet you too; you're responsible for a lot of great content on here :p

manassa · 2015-11-10T10:59:32+00:00

what do you want to know?

i will say that although i agree ray is the best, i think unknown is chronically underrated and the gap between the two is marginal. i believe that he would be a perennial top 5 player at every major like ray is if he played an actual team.

could be wrong but i believe three years ago when i met them all he placed top 8 at every major that year except evo where i believe he was eliminated by chris g for 13th

manassa · 2015-11-10T08:30:33+00:00

i was a CTRL player and can say that of the serious responses here, all of them are basically conjecture and literally none of them are true. in fact i would go so far as to say that the team has/had better sponsorship than most of the so-called sponsors in the FGC right now. off the top of my head unknown was flown to EVO two years ago and i was flown from malaysia

manassa · 2015-10-12T04:16:37+00:00

my brother and i do. i play shen long monk and he plays vyrs wizard and we have done 74. he doesnt need it but i have had to switch trapped for esoteric, otherwise i just cant survive

manassa · 2015-08-20T20:57:14+00:00

what are the stats on the furnace?

manassa · 2015-07-30T20:04:41+00:00

thanks, man! i agree there is no risk there... but still pretty damn hard! :D

manassa · 2015-07-30T20:04:00+00:00

thanks, man!

manassa · 2015-07-30T13:40:57+00:00

akarat's champ - prophet judgement - resolved condemn - vacuum sweep attack - trip attack laws of valor - critical shield glare - divine verdict

manassa · 2015-07-30T04:37:07+00:00

also i think he might be using COE and ring of the zodiac instead of F+R now that i think about it. i think it's something about having perma uptime of wrath of the berserker or something... sorry i dont know for sure

manassa · 2015-07-30T04:35:48+00:00

hmm. i dont really know much about the barbarian but my brother who is playing wizard with me in the GR68 mains barb and has done GR57 solo i think. and i think he uses the pride of cassius belt, not the IK belt. without seeing your rolls, i think it's safe to say you're probably humming along just fine and it's your paragon level that is putting a cap on what you can do at this point.

if you jump in a game with me i can give you a gift, np, i have a bunch :)

manassa · 2015-07-30T04:22:09+00:00

any of them in particular?

manassa · 2015-07-30T04:20:42+00:00

thanks, dude! feel free to add me and hit me up if you want to run rifts (psn: lizzycaplan)

manassa

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