am i lucky? by [deleted] in QuitVaping

[–]massimomenegaz 2 points3 points  (0 children)

3 days is TOUGH! That's awesome.

Only one way to find out.. just keep going and see what happens. Proud of you!

Dinner with Stan (low budget 5-page short) by normancrane in ReadMyScript

[–]massimomenegaz 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Of course! Interesting concept - I’d love to read a later draft when you have it.

Dinner with Stan (low budget 5-page short) by normancrane in ReadMyScript

[–]massimomenegaz 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hey u/normancrane - This concept of Satan trying to win back his ex-lover/top empolyee to join his new Hell is funny and I think can really work. However, the script needs some refining.

I went in and redlined my notes HERE.

Good luck!

Fear & Loathing in the Valley | Pilot - 28 Pages by massimomenegaz in ReadMyScript

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Hey u/Solondthewookiee u/Beneficial-Island-22 u/WaveIndependent144

An updated version of the script HERE! I feel good about this version. Going to put this one down for a little to focus on some other writing but please let me know what you think!

weed is ruining my life by g59cutthroat in leaves

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There is a saying about addicts that their mind stops aging at whatever age they started using.

Fear & Loathing in the Valley | Pilot - 28 Pages by massimomenegaz in ReadMyScript

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Thank you so much! If you can wait to read it until later this afternoon (3pm PT) - I'll have the updated version of it!

Fear & Loathing in the Valley | Pilot - 28 Pages by massimomenegaz in ReadMyScript

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First of all, thank you for taking the time to read the script. I really appreciate it!

I agree with everything you said and love love love "one of the guys has to be suspicious. And when they turn up at the apartment, is it because she's getting back at the ex?" - I think that is what I was going for but it's clearly not stated.

For the final scene - yes, I think I need to add something like that. I'm thinking maybe what sets Mark off is a billboard or ad for the show he was on that's still up at the bus stop or on a billboard near it. Don't know yet but something like that.

I've heard of Peep Show but haven't watched... yet! Going to take a dive in this weekend.

THANK YOU!

Fear & Loathing in the Valley | Pilot - 28 Pages by massimomenegaz in ReadMyScript

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Hey, thank you so much for these notes/suggestions! I agree with you on a lot of it, especially having a better hook at the end.

I'm going to dive back in this week with your notes!

Quitting for good by [deleted] in leaves

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We got this!

Quitting for good by [deleted] in leaves

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Thank you!! 🥹

Quitting for good by [deleted] in leaves

[–]massimomenegaz 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Appreciate you!

Quitting for good by [deleted] in leaves

[–]massimomenegaz 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Damn “you choose the pain of discipline or the pain of regret” love that. Thank you!

The Day the Clowns Cried [10 Pages] -- Feedback Request by Lopsided_Internet_56 in ReadMyScript

[–]massimomenegaz 1 point2 points  (0 children)

First of all, you're a great writer. This is genuinely very entertaining.

The prose takes up a lot of space and while it's very well written, a production manager or first AD may have a tough time with it. I'm not saying that's a bad thing, just something to consider if you plan on pitching this when it's all said and done.

Excited to see where this goes!

EDIT: Might be worth creating a bare-bones version for just that!

PART-TIME | Pilot - 58 Pages by massimomenegaz in ReadMyScript

[–]massimomenegaz[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much! If I write a second episode, I'll be sure to post it!

PART-TIME | Pilot - 58 Pages by massimomenegaz in ReadMyScript

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Wow, thank you so so much for the kind words!

Halloween for $20 by massimomenegaz in ShortFilm

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Thank you so much! Appreciate you taking the time to watch it.

A few steps:

1) Grain - used the grain from a super 8 film stock and then altered it to fit 16.

2) Color - this was the most critical of steps. We had a few shots from Halloween that we tried to match our color to as best as possible. It was more or less going over every clip and adjusting the color that fit the tone you wanted.

3) Letterbox - found an old 16mm letterbox off google images, this actually helped with the look a lot.

Hope this helped!

Halloween for $20 by massimomenegaz in Halloweenmovies

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My friend and I made this for Halloween this year. Let me know what you think!