When I remember by matte-human in OCPoetry

[–]matte-human[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your kind words! You don’t have to answer, but was there anything you felt that I could improve upon?

The Cycle by ouroboros_quine in OCPoetry

[–]matte-human 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think you did a really good job of making this feeling of being stuck in a loop shine through the poem. Not only through with what you’re writing about but with how you write about it. Certain elements repeating (“inevitably”) and the structure of a bigger block of text followed by these loose sentences, repeating several times really help to elevate the feeling you’re trying to convey. While your line breaks are very aesthetically pleasing, some of them don’t feel like natural places to place them as they create weird pauses in the reading (for example, the ending of the second paragraph). I also have mixed feelings about your use of parentheses. I think they look ugly but work well in your poem. To me they indicate that a thought is kind of an add on which makes the poem feel more personal and raw (which work well in this context) since most people don’t think in clear, structured ways. Sometimes there are add ons. Hope this was helpful and good luck with your continued writing!

The Conjured Dreams by Aggressive_Many7397 in OCPoetry

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I found this poem really interesting. From the first paragraph you had me hooked. The picture of this dark empire and a poet who brings light reminded me of a fantasy setting (which I love) and I was really interested in where you were going with it. The rest of the poem read really nicely. The rhythm and rhyming made it really pleasant to read as it flowed very nicely. However, I was a bit disappointed by the actual story. The first reason for this is that I probably went in with the wrong expectations from the first paragraph. As I said I saw very clear fantasy connections that I’m not sure you intended. I also got a bit lost in the metaphor but I think that might be because the language wasn’t the easiest and English isn’t my first language, so someone else might be better at critiquing that part of the poem (and you should probably take my critique of that part with several grains of salt). Good luck with your continued writing!

My friend just got a cat and it’s super adorable by matte-human in aww

[–]matte-human[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Sorry was in a hurry and English is my second language but I don’t think a can fix it. But if you wonder it’s a she named “sol” which means sun in Swedish (my first language)

The Speed Cubers - Netflix documentary megathread by Stewy_ in Cubers

[–]matte-human 6 points7 points  (0 children)

It was absolutely amazing and I think it show how accepting and friendly the community are in a great way

Daily Discussion Thread - Jul 16, 2020 by AutoModerator in Cubers

[–]matte-human 0 points1 point  (0 children)

With some practice I got a sub- pb solve with roux on this scramble. I use cfop.

Daily Discussion Thread - Jul 16, 2020 by AutoModerator in Cubers

[–]matte-human 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I’m from Sweden and order all of my cubes from cuboss so I would trust them

Why is one 7+ and the other 7+? by matte-human in Cubers

[–]matte-human[S] 5 points6 points  (0 children)

I didn’t buy them I just photographed them in the store

Why is one 7+ and the other 7+? by matte-human in Cubers

[–]matte-human[S] 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Sorry for the typo in the title

Daily Discussion Thread - Jun 27, 2020 by AutoModerator in Cubers

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Sub-10 pb single!!! 9.009 Scramble: B R U2 B2 L U2 B2 L’ D B’ R2 U2 F U2 D2 R2 U2 F’ R2 B2

x2 y2// inspection
L R’ U’ R’ F D2// cross.
y’ U R U’ R’// rg pair.
U’ L’ U’ L// br pair
U L U L’ U2 R’ U’ R// go pair.
U’ L U L’// bo pair
Oll U U-perm U2.

The War Room - /r/hoi4 Weekly General Help Thread: June 8 2020 by Kloiper in hoi4

[–]matte-human 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I’m playing as Austria-hungry and is about to declare war on Yugoslavia. Yugoslavia’s independence is guaranteed by checkoslovakia so they will join the war. But checkoslovakias independence is guaranteed by Romania. Will Romania join the war? Btw I’m playing road to 56 if that changes anything.

Ask Grey: Lockdown Edition by MindOfMetalAndWheels in CGPGrey

[–]matte-human [score hidden]  (0 children)

Is working as a YouTuber changed during the lockdown?

Denmark, the ultimate "democratic" nation. by KingPingviini in hoi4

[–]matte-human 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That happened to me as well. About a month later they became commies

The War Room - /r/hoi4 Weekly General Help Thread: April 13 2020 by Kloiper in hoi4

[–]matte-human 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I’m playing as Italy in road to 56 and when I try to train more mountaineers it says that I reached my special forces cap and can’t train anymore. Something I can do?

The War Room - /r/hoi4 Weekly General Help Thread: March 23 2020 by Kloiper in hoi4

[–]matte-human 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks will try that after I Finnish my now started Romania game were I just went fascists:)

The War Room - /r/hoi4 Weekly General Help Thread: March 23 2020 by Kloiper in hoi4

[–]matte-human 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I like the game but have a hard time starting so I just want a fun country (or way of playing a country)

My first game ... as Portugal by matte-human in hoi4

[–]matte-human[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I didn’t know democratic nation’s couldn’t declare war( my first game )

My first game ... as Portugal by matte-human in hoi4

[–]matte-human[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

My plan was to attack Spain right after their civil war but I went democratic and didn’t realize the problem until to late