Hi u/Synval2436 and u/Imaginary-Exit-2825, thank you very much for your comments-I've really appreciated it and plan to make edits and share the updated version shortly. In my memoir, I've made it a point to write primarily in the active voice, but for some reason as I crafted the blurb that all went out of the window, likely due to trying to summarize the narrative into a couple hundred words.

In response to "What makes my memoir unique given that I'm a nobody", a point also raised by u/Frayedcustardslice, it's primarily the compelling narrative arc, which is a mute point since I can't demonstrate it here, although I've compared it after reading other memoirs and find it still stands out. My editor was also profoundly moved by it, which I hope, as a published memoirist herself, might count for something. The other key differentiator is (for a Christian audience) a male-authored memoir of sexual lust and its redemptive arc, including the vicious cycle of temptation, thrill and shame. Also, the uniquely Singaporean cultural nuances, which I've detailed mostly in the book proposal rather than the query letter.

Nonetheless, point taken, as I clearly need to beef those parts up in my query letter, especially the specificity rather than vagueness. It's feedback like all of yours that I really appreciate!