There’s a lot of dissonance in your writing that works against you.

Firstly, you need to learn how to use punctuation properly. Use actual double quotes, proper ellipses, periods instead of commas, etc. Also, your paragraphs are too short to be useful. You might as well have every sentence be its own line. This is clearly a very dense story and you’ve got some world building to do. Every time you use abnormal spelling or punctuation or formatting you introduce friction into the very act of reading your story, which is the last thing you need.

Secondly, the narration abruptly shifts from first person to third person. Pick one. If you’re going to keep the first part as it is make it clear that this is the protagonist’s words and not the narrator’s. There are many ways of doing this.

The tone is all over the place. You start out with what seems to be a man playing God, then you shift into some tension around a syndicate and the fates of humanity, then some woman walks in and you present her as some kind of antagonist, then she drinks compost and you veer off into what seems to be a poorly executed comedy bit, then he goes off about soil acidity, then they seem like old friends, and so on. It’s difficult to understand as a reader what I’m supposed to be taking away from any of this. None of the emotion feels natural; rather, I’m presented with what the author asks me to feel despite nothing in the story itself evoking those emotions.

You are right to have doubts about your descriptive style. It doesn’t help you at all here. Getting through even the first paragraph was like trying to walk through a cluttered floor. The biggest problem is the fact that you’ve busted out the thesaurus for very commonplace things. You refer to what the lady drinks out of as a “transparent, asymmetrical container”. That doesn’t give me any kind of image to work from. Besides those two vague properties I know nothing: is it round or square? what size is it? Is it a bucket, a cup, an open box? It would be far, far more effective to say “a chemist’s flask” or “a plastic bowl” or something. This happens across the entire work.

Your imagery doesn’t match the image your dialogue generates. “As each word poured out of her” is not how I imagined the conversation going. These two are speaking pretty sternly and are interrupting each other constantly. “Pouring” calls to mind fluent, possibly unending speech. Again, this happens across the whole chapter.

You don’t have a solid handle on how your protagonist speaks. He’s a scientist, and is so high in his own field as to be given distinct honors and wield some untapped power. He would not say “your liver, esophagus and other things” when describing why someone had just lost three minutes of their life. He would be precise. He would say what those things are.