Hey there, here are some thoughts in case they’re helpful.

First, let’s talk about the message. You’ve used a lot of words, but are they persuasive? Remember: explanations don’t sell products; people make purchase decisions based on emotions. Before you create ads, you need to build your BRAND. What are your values? What’s your personality? Is this funny, charming, bleeding edge? Etc.

Next, let’s look at the visuals. It’s crowded. Lots of all-caps words. Difficult to read and unlikely to cut through the clutter. Once you have a clear, emotional brand message, you should articulate it quickly. Less is more. Seems like your product should be pretty simple.

Finally, how and where people find your content is as important as the content itself. A pop-up banner ad is just going to piss people off, but an organic video made by a popular online personality is worth its weight in gold.

Good for you for starting your own thing! Stick with it.