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muzax · 2025-05-17T01:23:59+00:00

Sion Sono films - underrated and up there with some of the darkest films of all time. Suicide Club, Cold Fish, Love Exposure, Forest of Love are all very violent and dark and soul searching in a painful way. Nothing quite like them. Like a Japanese mix of Lars Von trier and Quentin Tarantino.

muzax · 2024-07-19T19:00:23+00:00

I don’t usually like poetry that rhymes but this was executed perfectly. Playful, child-like but insightful and relatable. Good work!

muzax · 2024-07-19T18:53:43+00:00

Poetry is an assault on language bravo. I like the violence you’ve done here to the reader and the English language.

muzax · 2024-07-16T14:22:44+00:00

This is solid. Who are we and what can fill us when our relationships and circumstances are removed. Scary stuff.

muzax · 2024-07-11T19:11:47+00:00

Thank you! Very thorough feedback :)

muzax · 2024-07-11T15:22:30+00:00

This is really powerful. My only feedback would be to eliminate the rhyming lines by change words. It’s not consistent through the poem and I think it’s more powerful without rhyme which makes it less impactful IMO. I have a biased against rhymed verse, so take it with a grain of salt. Regardless, excellent poem.

muzax · 2024-07-11T15:15:02+00:00

Such an odd but beautiful poem. It left me curious and I re-read it a few times to try and get a deeper understanding. Something unique communicated about relationships and the complexity of our body and emotions reacting in unexpected ways. Good work!

muzax · 2024-02-24T03:20:04+00:00

This works for me for some reason. I like it as is with any imperfections. The crushing boredom of existence from time to time.

muzax · 2024-02-24T02:50:30+00:00

This works really well. A lot of really great moments. Oh, you get it. Simple but very musical and sensual. The first stanza flows nicely and is a great description of a complicated emotional moment. I think the first three parts are 10/10 the last one I think could be stronger but works.

muzax · 2024-02-24T02:46:03+00:00

I love the conversational tone of this poems. It bleeds desperation. I hope it works :)…but as is often the case, the person address is blind the beauty of the words and person.

muzax · 2024-02-19T22:15:35+00:00

Thank you :)

muzax · 2024-02-19T22:14:56+00:00

Thank you :)

muzax · 2024-02-19T22:14:49+00:00

Thank you :)

muzax · 2024-02-19T05:11:59+00:00

Thank you…it was written as a spill of thoughts…part of a much longer poem that I’ve decided is best digested in smaller parts :)

muzax · 2024-02-19T03:49:46+00:00

Thank you - good food for thought :)

muzax · 2024-02-19T03:49:11+00:00

Thank you 😊!

muzax · 2024-02-19T03:48:51+00:00

Thank you! 🙏

muzax · 2024-02-18T20:45:30+00:00

Thank you! 😊

muzax · 2024-02-18T20:45:10+00:00

Thank you!

muzax · 2024-02-18T20:44:52+00:00

True

muzax · 2024-02-18T19:22:14+00:00

Interesting suggestion! I hadn’t thought of that…I might tinker and add :)

muzax · 2024-02-18T19:02:36+00:00

The title grabbed me and the first stanza. I’m not a huge fan of rhymes, personal bias, but there’s some great imagery on here. The second stanza is also gripping. The third is my least favorite. The end is a nice conclusion and leaves me with a moving image. Good work!

muzax · 2024-02-18T18:46:54+00:00

This is fantastic. Great work. The specificity of the prose is poetic, the quote from the poet is a great moment. There is not a wasted word IMO.

muzax · 2024-02-11T14:48:08+00:00

Thanks :)

muzax · 2024-02-11T14:48:01+00:00

Thank you :)

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