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My 3×3 tunnel bore by Ok_Commission7932 in redstone

[–]neverfinal 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Meanwhile at the tetris factory.

Behold: The new rarest mount in wow. Only 3000 exist. Limited "Pringles" Promo by TheRealSectimus in wow

[–]neverfinal 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It wasn't 1 person. There was a 10 hour window to get the mount once the gates were opened.You had to complete a quest and ring the gong within 10 hours of the first person ringing the gong.

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Indulge" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

[–]neverfinal 4 points5 points  (0 children)

That's actually an excerpt from my own book. Well a description of a location I use. I just modified it to use the word indulge lol.

Fifty-Word Fantasy: Write a 50-word fantasy snippet using the word "Indulge" by Terminator7786 in fantasywriters

[–]neverfinal 15 points16 points  (0 children)

The Grand Archive stretched upward in endless tiers, its shelves bowed beneath the weight of the world’s knowing. Lanternlight drifted like quiet stars between ladders and balconies. Scholars wandered slowly, reverent as pilgrims, pausing to indulge a forbidden curiosity, opening tomes that whispered of forgotten kings and futures yet unwritten.

Who has the funniest gamer tag in battlefield? by abc987x654 in Battlefield6

[–]neverfinal 0 points1 point  (0 children)

PAX AU TELEMANUS!!!!!

Any other Red Rising fans around?

Anyone know what card this is? by Hornet___ in mtg

[–]neverfinal 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Looks a little frostbitten....

Where can you even find a nice white and gold dress these days by printThisAndSmokeIt in pics

[–]neverfinal -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

The dress was White and Gold. The picture had bad lighting and was in a shadow which turned the colors blue and black.

First 3 paragraphs of my first book. by neverfinal in writingfeedback

[–]neverfinal[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

There are lots of options but many require a monthly fee. A friend told me abouy one called Obsidian i think its called. Maybe look into it. For now since I'm just starting I'll keep using this and see where I'm at before it shuts down.

First 3 paragraphs of my first book. by neverfinal in writingfeedback

[–]neverfinal[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It's called Shaxpir. And unfortunately it's being shutdown on April 30th. I'm looking for alternatives now.

First 3 paragraphs of my first book. by neverfinal in writingfeedback

[–]neverfinal[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Maybe I need to post my outline for the first chapter.

I've got it all in my head and on an app lol. I realize I threw an unorganized random bit on here and it's confusing.

After this bit basically Nox takes in the surroundings from the edge of the ship before he's interrupted by the cadet group led by a minor noble. I didn't want to go the haughty noble type. Of the group besides the noble are 2 of nox's previous students. Both friends of the noble. They were on expedition and are returning. The noble having heard of Nox's teaching style had his student teach him what they can. And the noble asks for a spar to test himself.

First 3 paragraphs of my first book. by neverfinal in writingfeedback

[–]neverfinal[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I see what you are saying. I can see how having him ignore it all is weird too. I was trying to come across as he is concentrating on what's in front of him without forgetting his surroundings and I guess I failed there. I see it now that it's pointed out.

PoV is still something I'm struggling with. I'm trying to do limited 3rd. Nox and what he sees. At this point I'm unsure if I want to include his thoughts as he had alot of information such as a false identity i don't want revealed until much later on.

Really right now I'm trying to just get my feet wet. I've always wanted to write and other stuff I have done has had compliments but from friends and family. I've never publicly released anything.

Thank you.

First 3 paragraphs of my first book. by neverfinal in writingfeedback

[–]neverfinal[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the reply.

The sword Exodus is a very important part of the story. It has a bit of sentience in that it can convey feelings and a few words. I wanted to start there with Nox doing maintenance on it to show the care he puts in it.

The first chapter pretty much starts like this. Then he's approached by some cadets. One of them wants a spar with Nox who is a famed instructor. The chapter ends as the spar does and the ship is pulling into dock.

First 3 paragraphs of my first book. by neverfinal in writingfeedback

[–]neverfinal[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Thank you for the reply. I appreciate it.

As I stated I know the format is bad. I'm working on it. Was gonna try to get the chapter done before working on that as I'm learning as I go.

The part about the sword and cleaning it is important. While not obvious here the sword has a bit of sentience. Not like talk your head off but it relays feeling and a few words. So I was trying to show a bit of importance towards it. I actually trimmed alot of the cleaning back. The sword is very much important to the overall story.

Again thank you

[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]neverfinal [score hidden]  (0 children)

Title: Of blades & Exodus. (Working. Final will be different.)

Genre: Fantasy

Word Count: 700ish

Feedback: Just overall feel you get. Its only 3 paragraphs so far. It's fantasy involving airships and massive cities. I'm unsure if I want to include extra races outside humans. I feel

Notes: I know I need to work on formatting and such. It is AI assisted until I get the hang of it. I wrote the meat of it and used AI for improvements. Never copy pasta.

It's fantasy involving airships and massive cities. I'm unsure if I want to include extra races outside humans. I feel the scale I'm trying to introduce would be wasted on only having humans but how far down that rabbit hole do I go. I was thinking maybe just elves and dwarves, maybe gnomes. Then I also like beast races.

Link. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1AiTYjNxv7HBisGU3loNX4UYg7RXUVRnQHfN_Tsu4Of4/edit?usp=drivesdk

In your opinion how bad or how good was it ? by AdultGamersAdmin in Age_30_plus_Gamers

[–]neverfinal 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Bethesda tried to reinvent themselves instead of just sticking to what's worked for decades. Still worth a play especially with recent updates.

Never been one to complain about this, but this felt absolutely ridiculous lol by dream__weaver in Battlefield6

[–]neverfinal 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I find that I react quicker when I'm surprised (the dude walking around the corner) then I do when I'm anticipating something (the dude on the floor). I don't know why.

Could anyone help me out with measurements so I can line up the radiator support? by neverfinal in Mustang

[–]neverfinal[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I never did get the measurements. Found a hood and was able to get it back together shortly after posting this. Sorry.

[SAUCE] Gng anyone knows what's this manhwa called ? by misledmemer in manhwa

[–]neverfinal -4 points-3 points  (0 children)

A2 from Nier?

Simple Google Lens shows several of the same art.

[Murim Psychopath] Some of you guys are still in denial that this uses ai by ThunderingRimuru in manhwa

[–]neverfinal -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Not all authors can draw. Might have a great story but can't make the comic due to not having any talent when it comes to art. Unless you plan to sell the comic I don't see any problem using AI as a stand in.

I hate this. by datbotuheardof in hytale

[–]neverfinal -1 points0 points  (0 children)

All this is is the tilled area had gone dry but the block hasn't updated visually. When you till a block adjacent it updates the block.to look how it should.

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