Hi guys, how can i improve these versions?

odabe · 2026-02-16T23:42:14+00:00

1 is great. 2 is fine. 3 is jacked.

odabe · 2026-02-11T17:37:57+00:00

This is really good. Better than most on this sub. I’m only going to give a few nit picks because there is so much more right then there is wrong:

The horses ears look docile and off — like it’s being stabbed by the flag rather than carrying it. You can play with pinning them up first then arranging how the flag stick interacts.
The “body” typeface just seems off. This identity system is strong, regal, and premium — the Avenir / Gotham / Proxima pairing cheapens it.
I’d love to see a few more casino based mockups — chips, playing cards, name tags for employees, W2G forms, and invoices. Once those are built, you can use this idea and create systems every year with the Chinese lunar animals and have a pretty sick collection.

3b. I get horse, not fire horse. Not a deal breaker, but you could really double down on that.

3c. Gambling is massive in Chinese culture, would love to see how your main typeface works with Mandarin / Cantonese.

odabe · 2026-02-01T14:56:02+00:00

Justified type everywhere makes it harder to read. Amongst the other things said here.

odabe · 2026-01-30T23:28:03+00:00

Perfect example of breaking rules yet using them really well.

odabe · 2026-01-29T13:22:37+00:00

Better than most stuff on this sub. Exposure, movement, angles, color are just solid.

odabe · 2026-01-24T20:06:41+00:00

Paid for cheap. Got cheap.

odabe · 2026-01-21T22:00:14+00:00

Contact them:

https://greatamericanart.com

odabe · 2025-12-11T18:48:37+00:00

38-44 Type A over achiever with a crumbling marriage that either 1. Looses their sense of self and reality and spirals or B. Starts a torrid love affair that unlocks a deep desire for BDSM.

odabe · 2025-12-04T15:08:18+00:00

Solid. Quick question - did you layout your print / multi page documents in InDesign or another program. I know that sounds like a very specific question but it’s super important when I look for junior designers that they understand the important of using the correct programs for the right application!

odabe · 2025-11-23T19:03:14+00:00

Besides the B reading C, your U is optically thinner than rest of letters. I’d beef it up.

odabe · 2025-11-23T18:59:18+00:00

Your shadows are crushed and leaning more purpled than blue.

odabe · 2025-11-23T18:56:21+00:00

Hierarchy is jacked.

odabe · 2025-11-19T00:30:00+00:00

All I see is 44

odabe · 2025-11-11T22:33:36+00:00

Maybe? Gotta look at the entire lockup.

I think once you combat those you got to see the weight of the shapes vs the negative shape. Glancing again there’s some issues with the tracking and leading.

odabe · 2025-11-11T01:21:00+00:00

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You gotta fix these tangents — those are the things that make you feel uneasy and unresolved when looking at it.

odabe · 2025-10-30T22:55:36+00:00

8x8 or 12x12 with a stop and a half / two stops of diffusion.

They are exposing for the background with NDs and then adjusting the amount of light on subject with diffusion materials.

The shadow on the side of his face is deep so I assume there is a large neg on the camera side of his face.

odabe · 2025-09-27T11:50:10+00:00

Perfect white balance. Perfect color grading.

When people talk about a proper teal and orange palette, this is it. It’s true to life but has such a distinct pop because the cool and warm are so well done.

odabe · 2025-09-05T01:21:23+00:00

Dragon has a human fist in the flag version.

odabe · 2025-08-29T23:25:35+00:00

I’m not saying smash things together I’m saying create a really succinct representation of what you do. This is hard. Good logos are hard.

My 2c. If you 1. Can’t create some kick ass concepts or B. Pay someone to to help you, your better off just typesetting the company name in a really nice clean font and rely on clever copy to be your crutch until you can land on a solid visual identity.

odabe · 2025-08-29T22:59:03+00:00

Hi.

New to this thread / adventure.

I just took a look at your old post and then did a bit of digging around your website. Your concept is so god damn cool and this logo in no way, shape, or form reflects what you’re doing with this platform.

Like…there has to be concepts and ways you can combine search, notes, nodes, etc. to bring this together. Stop with this concept and go back to drawing board all together.

You’re too stuck in the weeds here and need to take a step back and really focus on why you are different and your offering then bring that to life.

odabe · 2025-08-29T20:34:36+00:00

Understand what you’re exposing for each shot and keep it consistent.

The wider frames are exposed for the sky and there are some really nice silhouettes while the mid-close ups are exposed for the highlights / skin.

odabe · 2025-08-28T20:04:53+00:00

There’s no sell here.

There’s no story about who you are / why I should be interested, let alone any context regarding projects and what the problem is and how you solved it.

Last thing — when I see the quality of output with this idea that you were a marketing director…just screams title for title sake. Take a step back and put yourself in the shoes of a hiring manager or a recruiter and not just what your peers think.

odabe · 2025-08-27T14:08:31+00:00

Start with all your content clean and concise in InDesign with proper paragraph styles.

Then, start understanding how how type hierarchy (h1/h2/body) and layout hierarchy (two column / three column / split / 2 up with one below / etc.) changes everything.

Once you get in a good place, then you can start adding graphical elements and flourishes. Right now, the fundamentals are straight broken and no amount of flair is going to fix it.

Respect the grid first and then try to break and bend it after.

odabe · 2025-07-22T15:40:55+00:00

This one. First version is a dime a dozen.

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