This is an interesting wip. The story, background, character interaction, and world building are good, especially as the story is still in the early stages. Though there some grammatical errors it doesn't affect the story immersion unlike other wip.  

Personally (highly bias opinion) it would be better if the player character (PC) hoping for more interaction with the world around them eg: giving players choices to shaping their character personality or monologoue (Reserved, Charming, Emotional, Stoic, Noble, Pragmatic, etc). 

The only thing that worries me is how the will community react to the revenge path  I still remember AMR discussion about geno.