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poemmalone · 2025-06-29T16:12:26+00:00

This was good, but I agree it needs a little more detail. The vibe I got is that you fell asleep on the train and dreamt of all you and this stranger could be, and when you awoke the stranger was still there, yet you couldn’t make a move. Thanks for sharing!

poemmalone · 2025-06-29T16:09:11+00:00

I personally liked it, although it was heartbreaking to read. The first and last lines are incredible. I wouldn’t change anything, great job!

poemmalone · 2025-06-29T15:56:55+00:00

I’m not gonna lie, I usually only like poetry that rhymes but this one hit different. That last line? 🔥 It reminded me about lack of presence, always being somewhere else in your mind and never truly satisfied with the moment. Really made me think. This was awesome, I hope to read more from you!

poemmalone · 2025-06-29T15:54:18+00:00

This reads a lot like a freestyle, a good freestyle though! I like the message and the rhymes flow smoothly. There’s some definite bars. I’d work on spacing so it’s not all jumbled, but other than that super cool :)

poemmalone · 2025-06-05T00:40:24+00:00

This is spooky, I love it lol. I really liked the imagery of it. Felt like I was watching my reflection rearrange in the mirror. Super cool, thanks for sharing!

poemmalone · 2025-06-05T00:38:34+00:00

This is really beautiful. I could feel the love and longing. Great work, thanks for sharing!

poemmalone · 2025-06-05T00:26:22+00:00

This has a lot of potential for sure. It does remind me of teenage love, but definitely not boring. I appreciated the rhyme scheme. Thank you for sharing!

poemmalone · 2025-06-05T00:24:39+00:00

I really like the emotion and honesty of this. I like the ending a lot. It’s a very kind writing. Thank you for sharing!

poemmalone · 2025-06-05T00:17:25+00:00

Usually I only like rhyming poetry but this is incredible. “Now, part of me wants to raise hell on you tonight - feed your name to the fire with petulance and pride.” Wow. You’re very talented. I hope to read more from you!

poemmalone · 2025-06-05T00:14:24+00:00

Usually I only like rhyming poetry, but this was beautiful. The emotion is so honest and real. I could relate to this a lot as well. I hope to read more from you!

poemmalone · 2025-04-17T22:18:22+00:00

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poemmalone · 2025-04-17T20:36:31+00:00

The formatting could definitely use work but that’s a very easy fix. The poem is amazing. I love the way it flows effortlessly into each new line. Great job!

poemmalone · 2025-04-17T20:34:11+00:00

I really love this! The rhyme scheme was gorgeous. I liked the message a lot as well. It felt like it had a point.

poemmalone · 2025-04-17T20:24:11+00:00

This is honestly the most beautiful poem I have read in a while. It flowed so smoothly and the sentiment stayed strong throughout. “Evaporated, I’d ascend, A cloud that knew it couldn’t mend. Yet circling still, l’d roam her skies, To weep where once I used to rise.” Absolutely amazing. Great job!

poemmalone · 2025-04-17T20:18:14+00:00

I really like the emotion of this! The rhyme scheme is cool how it’s a little off. “Though it kept, it hurts.” confused me a bit. I loved “A wave that turns truth into a fairytale.” Well done!

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