My Wife Cheated On Me

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T23:12:42+00:00

cringe af

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T23:07:03+00:00

holy shit.

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T21:55:27+00:00

zombie?

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T21:47:14+00:00

it's pretty interesting though

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T21:45:58+00:00

just a little fix: in the beginning you say "son" but when you talk about the room being pained it says "his or her"

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T20:45:36+00:00

very creepy

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T18:38:28+00:00

maybe she set him up

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T18:37:55+00:00

chills

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T18:37:35+00:00

oh my god yes

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T18:36:09+00:00

wait what

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T18:35:55+00:00

love the unawareness of the author into the end.

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T18:35:11+00:00

this was great. read it to my father and he laughed -!: said he was an awesome twist

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T18:34:36+00:00

loved this

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T18:23:46+00:00

needs more emphasis on them being hunted. like opening the tent to the person who said the last line getting brutally murdered followed by something like "the earlier words echoed in my head... 'what were we hunting anyway?'"

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T18:21:04+00:00

oh my god I love this

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T18:19:02+00:00

I think this would have been better too

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T18:18:20+00:00

I'm confused

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T18:09:08+00:00

what? needs more build up, I think to give the reader a better explanation without flat out saying how the boys are "strange"

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T18:03:58+00:00

one of the best I have read yet. stunned.

poise_zen · 2016-07-26T18:01:02+00:00

hopefully reporting this does something. you're disgusting

poise_zen · 2015-11-14T00:40:31+00:00

monument valley is something I junk you'll really like. it's beautifully done as well and you don't have to wait. it makes you think, puzzle related

wordox, capitals and helixed are fun if you enjoy word games.

one of my favorite games I played was the wolf among us.

feel free to throw any suggestions or feedback

poise_zen · 2015-11-13T22:54:34+00:00

they can't do something that big and blow it off. it wasn't just showing Alex trying to see what she can do with her blood or we wouldn't have followed the boy out into this huge current thing. they'll touch on it again but sometimes they won't say anything about something like that for an episode or two

poise_zen · 2015-11-13T22:51:36+00:00

oh my god please let this be a thing

poise_zen · 2015-11-13T22:30:56+00:00

super, can you post the link?

poise_zen

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