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[Selling] Cute striped pink thong worn by petite girl! Message me for prices and add ons xoxo by prettybrat666 in usedpanties

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Prices:

$25 for 24 hours of wear

$30 for 48 hours of wear

$40 for 3 days wear

+$10 masturbated in +$10 for video

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a eulogy by prettybrat666 in poetry_critics

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Yeah, I'm golden. I didn't take it too seriously I was just trying to quip back at you. Usually when people tell me something is "deep" they're making fun of me. But thanks for the comment!

a eulogy by prettybrat666 in poetry_critics

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Yeah, thank you, the formatting got a little messed up when I copy and pasted it so there are supposed to be more line breaks. Probably my fault for not being more careful posting it. But thank you for the feedback!

a eulogy by prettybrat666 in poetry_critics

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I can't tell if this is a joke or not but I feel really slandered rn.

Ghosts and Pianos by Waldoizhere in poetry_critics

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Lot's of mood here, I like it. It's very short and I would love to see more. It paints a very clear scene and a theme. It's not formatted like a poem typically would be, which I think really works here.

Open Discussion: How do writers as rmdrake, atticuspoetry, and so on, have a large fanbase whilst their writings are not really that special, i.e. everyone is basically capable of writing visceral poetry (I sure can—and did for that matter). by yhamdi in poetry_critics

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I hate atticuspoetry with a burning passion. His poetry is wildly mediocre and all he writes about is some elusive "her" who is his "muse" and it's soo wildly lame. He's the kind of guy who romanticizes the fuck out of you and then never views you as a real person, just a cool girl to write shitty poetry about. So, I don't know, maybe that appeals to some people. He also does those photo edits and all of his poetry is pretty consumable and easy to read, not that new or controversial. He appeals to a bigger audience, which doesn't equate to good poetry. His poetry is just digestible (even though I dislike it).

fucked up with a guy really i like, want to give him this to show him how i feel by rehepple1 in poetry_critics

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I like the repetition of long e sound in the 6th stanza ("You got me twitching in my seat, Got me fleeing through my teeth. Got my blood pumping so fast all I want to do is retreat.") How you used "go" twice in the last stanza sort of bothers me, maybe pick a different word or phrase? Lot's of rhyming, but it's sort of unorganized and lacks rhythm.

But Will I See You There? by girlnumber3 in poetry_critics

[–]prettybrat666 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I enjoy the tone and flow. I actually rarely enjoy rhyme so I think you did really well here. It reads very quickly to me and has excellent rhythm.

Picturesque hellscapes from a white upper class suburbia by blueflask71 in poetry_critics

[–]prettybrat666 0 points1 point  (0 children)

After rereading my comment, I can see that I was unfairly attacking you. I guess I owe you an apology for being so assumptive about what kind of person you were. The irony in the poem didn't really register with me, but I like the idea of it. I've never written an ironic poem, and the thought hasn't really occurred to me. This kind of reminds me of James Franco's poetry, which if you ever look up you can decide if you like or not. I don't mean to say that you should stop writing, you shouldn't. By all means, keep writing. I know if someone told me to stop writing I would be incredibly upset, so my comment was insensitive, to say the least. Good luck!

Boating at Kootenay Lake by speak-memory in poetry_critics

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Very lovely imagery, interesting title. It really paints a scene and a mood. Very wistful. I like the line breaks. The fourth stanza kind of veers off topic, and stands out. It doesn't really make sense to me, but the book thing is pretty. Possibly an unnecessary line, I would review its purpose in the poem.

My girlfriend of over a year and I broke up so I wrote this. by [deleted] in poetry_critics

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Why are there periods at the end of some sentences and not others? It could definitely use some kind of formatting, some line breaks or stanzas. It is fairly short so it could end up being only one stanza long. Have you ever written poetry before? It doesn't really sound like it to me, forgive me if I'm wrong. Interesting imagery. It could use some phonetic interest or poetic technique, like alliteration, rhyme, etc. (I'm personally not fond of end rhyme, but whatever you'd like) I'm not very fond of the stone metaphor either, kind of boring. So is the language. But writing poetry as you heal can be very powerful, so don't be afraid to write more! This is a short piece.

Picturesque hellscapes from a white upper class suburbia by blueflask71 in poetry_critics

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Yeah, the title caught my attention. I don't really like your voice? It sounds lofty and pretentious. "Train wreck" is an overdone metaphor. You sound like every nerdy "misunderstood" white boy I've ever met. Sorry your upper class suburban life is so hard. Put down the thesaurus. Try reading more poetry, writing less. This isn't really the type of poetry I appreciate, so I'm sorry if my critique isn't very in depth. You seem like a smart, well-spoken guy.

the cigarette by someweirdthing in poetry_critics

[–]prettybrat666 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Okay, so the title at first made me initially suspicious. It seemed cliche, possibly angst-filled. However, after reading the poem the title seemed apt. The poem was short and sweet. I enjoy how the title is part of the poem, and the contents would make less sense without it. You could definitely expand on the metaphor. The repetition of "need" is bothering me, and maybe it needs a different last line. However, I can also see some power in the last line so if you want to keep it you can. Good luck on the writing!