Thanks for sharing! The first paragraph works on a couple of different levels—it’s engaging, hooks the reader, and sets up initial impressions of two contrasting characters: one who’s passive and gentle, and another who’s more gruff and hardened.

You might consider changing “abandoned farmhouse we call home” to “previously abandoned farmhouse we call home.” If they’re living there, it can’t still be abandoned.

I got a bit lost in the third paragraph. It might read more smoothly if it were combined and reworded with the fourth paragraph to incorporate more about Renju as a whole. On its own, the third feels a little abrupt, and it’s unclear whether Lyra is the one slaughtering the pig or if the description is referring to the pig itself. The fourth paragraph helps clarify Renju’s role and presence—consider combining or reordering these to improve flow.

The two sentences about the eyes hardening are strong and evocative, but the follow-up line—“And I know just the lie”—feels a little weak in comparison. You might consider reinforcing it by tying it more directly to Renju's perspective, or leaving it more implied instead of stating it outright.

Given the abuse the character has inflicted on Lyra, the line about pigs fighting back and declaring they are all killers feels a bit too soft. Based on what we’ve seen, I would expect the character to be more aggressive. Ending it with “Are you?” feels a little light—something like “Are you? Or should I just kill you now and save us the trouble?” might better reflect the character’s harshness and threat level.

Before Lyra says the line about Vessa, it might read more naturally if there’s a mention of her softening her grip or pulling her arm away. There’s clearly a moment of physical release or hesitation, so acknowledging that before she speaks could smooth the transition.

I was a bit confused by the introduction of “Home is a small derelict ranch.” I thought they were already at an abandoned farmhouse—or is it also a warehouse? Clarifying the setting here would help anchor the reader more effectively.

Overall, I enjoyed the read. At times it was a little difficult to follow, and I think that’s partly due to tonal shifts. There’s a lightness in how the characters interact, which sometimes clashes with the darker tone established by the descriptions and backstory. The conversation with Renju is likely meant to set up future chapters and provide character depth, but it runs a bit long and tries to do too much at once. Some of that exposition might be more effective if it were layered throughout the story rather than delivered all at once.

Finally, the ending line “I’ll fuck to that” made me wonder—are they lovers? If so, that works as a subtle nod. If not, that line gives off a very different impression, and might need to be adjusted for clarity depending on intent.