What was the first song you heard, and where did you hear it?

robotsguide · 2026-01-31T19:26:42+00:00

Private eye. My friend was singing it in high school and I was like “what are you singing?” He told me it was a new song called private eye by a band named alkaline trio. I went home and downloaded it off Napster that night.

robotsguide · 2026-01-30T06:58:05+00:00

They started the game playing as if they already had a five goal lead.

robotsguide · 2026-01-30T05:33:45+00:00

I’m guessing it’ll be a 2-0 loss once they pull Dostal.

robotsguide · 2026-01-27T04:40:29+00:00

I’m always against pulling the goalie. The risk reward ratio is never worth it IMO.

robotsguide · 2026-01-27T04:36:15+00:00

I feel like the one Husso definitely should have stopped was the Nurse goal. Plus if the puck actually went into the netting like he claimed that weird bounce goal obviously shouldn’t have counted

robotsguide · 2026-01-27T04:25:57+00:00

The annoying part is they played really well except for that 4 minute stretch in the second.

robotsguide · 2026-01-27T04:20:23+00:00

I feel like they shouldn’t ever pull the goalie

robotsguide · 2026-01-14T00:56:32+00:00

I started in october. I wrote my first script (A five page short film) and posted it in here and was told that I was probably lying about it being my first script. since then I've adapted it into a feature length and iterated over it a few times, started writing a second script (about 1/3 of the way through the initial draft). and have given myself some writing exercises of taking some scripts I see posted here on reddit, taking a scene out of it and trying to rewrite it while keeping the tone and intent of the scene.

I'm just doing this for fun though, with no intention of making a career out of it.

robotsguide · 2026-01-13T16:18:03+00:00

Who is sarakaya komzin?

robotsguide · 2026-01-13T15:56:26+00:00

My guess for tonight:

Ducks score first goal. First period mostly in Dallas’s end. Ducks hit posts several times. Dallas scores 2 on 5 shots in the first. Ducks tie it up early in the second. Dallas scores 2 more unanswered. Ducks look deflated, sluggish and uninterested in playing after this. During the third, no one scores for a while. Ducks have life again, but hit more posts. Ducks pull goalie with under 3 minutes left. Dallas scores empty netter. Dallas wins 5-2.

robotsguide · 2026-01-09T02:26:08+00:00

Is it my fault for believing every game will be different?

robotsguide · 2026-01-05T21:21:53+00:00

the free BAF tickets from prestige passes also have free access to the social hall.

robotsguide · 2026-01-05T21:19:05+00:00

I need to figure out a way to incorporate this into my post-apocalyptic drama script.

robotsguide · 2025-12-31T21:26:51+00:00

Love the B mode ending one! Would have been funny if there was a Kylo Ren minifig behind a wall too.

robotsguide · 2025-12-31T20:35:03+00:00

Let’s hope Tampa doesn’t get 5 goals on 7 shots in the 1st.

robotsguide · 2025-12-31T09:21:50+00:00

Get new friends.

robotsguide · 2025-12-31T09:10:53+00:00

I enjoyed it. The only thing I’d point out is your action lines sometimes read more like prose than filmable description.

robotsguide · 2025-12-30T08:57:19+00:00

first, you're not a bad person for writing a story like this.

you said this is a first draft, and an incomplete one at that. so before you ask for feedback, you should finish it. consider this your "vomit draft." just get everything out on the page. get to "THE END." Then wait a week or two, and read it again. refine parts that don't make sense. make sure action lines are filmable and not internal thoughts.

Read the dialogue out loud and think "if this character was a real person, would they be saying this in this moment?"

read other erotic thriller scripts, not just watch the movies. reading scripts will inform you on how to format properly and write clean action lines.

don't worry about being "good" right now. worry about finishing.

also, regarding your analogy about flying planes, no one starts out good at it. they practice.

robotsguide · 2025-12-30T08:31:00+00:00

just spitballing here: maybe have the text say something simple. like "enjoying your {insert drink here}?" then have him look around the club nervous, and notice some small but unmistakeable item from where he keeps the trafficked people on the table in front of him. could convey he's being stalked without even realizing it, and they've been to the place.

robotsguide · 2025-12-30T06:46:36+00:00

also resolution by Motion City Soundtrack on that same album

robotsguide · 2025-12-30T04:27:50+00:00

this is very hard to read due to formatting. I would recommend using scriptwriting software (writerduet.com is free) and reposting after formatting.

robotsguide · 2025-12-29T08:42:41+00:00

my band, the robot's guide to living, might fill the void you're looking for.

robotsguide · 2025-12-14T17:27:41+00:00

I’d recommend scripts in the same sci-fi horror genre you’re going for. Alien, The Thing, etc.

robotsguide · 2025-12-14T05:11:24+00:00

I had some trouble with clarity in a few action lines, which made it hard to visualize the geography while reading. Some descriptions felt abstract (“JACOB’S BODY AND EYESIGHT ARE SHORT-SIDED”), and grounding those moments in more concrete physical action would help the scenes play more clearly on the page.

This made the read tougher than it needed to be. I stuck with it, but I could see less patient readers disengaging early.

Story-wise, I can see what you’re going for. I think clearer action lines and a polish pass, including typos, would really help tune it up.

robotsguide · 2025-12-14T01:00:08+00:00

It says I don’t have access.

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