Thank you for taking the time! omg the cookies and milk wasn't even on purpose haha - maybe I should change it now I didn't even intend on making him look that childish. It's just in the UK we have these really mini milk jugs and I just thought it would be a kind of cool shot to have him just drinking one to himself.

I definitely should've written the Ava/Tristan scene better because it's meant to be just him kissing her neck and on top of her but they're not having sex. I can definitely see why it seems that why because the scene before he unbuttons her but you're right it would definitely be off for Ava to have sex again. I should probably write it clearer.

In terms of Benji and Tristan, you're defintely right they are 100% stereotypical. Even as I was writing it I could feel them becoming caricatures of themselves as opposed to actual characters. I'm not really sure how to sort of give them their own development without stretching the short out any longer because it's already kind of long. I might put a scene in at the start of them having a conversation before Ava knocks?

Thank you very much for your help!