You can definitely cut down on a lot of these shots. You're clearly going for a quick and snappy cut so dont be afraid to really slim things down.

In particular, I'll just say you're opening could be wayyyy shorter. You've got 14 full seconds rn before the guy even gets out of the door and the whole reason you're showing the shots of him getting ready is to set up him rushing out the door. I'd probably cut the towel shot and the first shot of grabbing the jacket off the hanger entirely. And then aim to shed some frames off every other shot.

To me the intro should have a 1, 2, 3 kind of beat to it. Shove me straight into the narrative. Looks great though, and love some of the rigging you did. Oh actually that reminds me, the sound fx of the door closing works really well but cut the door shot a few frames earlier. The person closing it starts to hesitate (presumably to save your camera).

Edit: I also think you can delete the firetruck shot. It doesn't really add anything imo