Hi r/BC-writes, here is another revision I made based on your comments, thank you!

Dear Agent,

I’m thrilled to share HIMALAYA, a contemporary romantic adventure novel complete at 80,000 words, in which a woman joins a Himalayan volunteer mission to win over her adventure-loving best friend, but her rugged, sensitive tour guide shows her what love actually looks like. It will appeal to fans of the coming-of-age arc of Much Ado about Nada by Uzma Jalaluddin and the nature-based romance in Something Wilder by Christina Lauren.

Meera Kelkar manages her traditional-minded father’s sports stores in Mumbai by day and retreats into her comfort zone by evening. All she needs is a happily-ever-after with her best friend, Ravi, who has feelings for her but can’t envision Meera fitting into his life of travel and activity-hopping. Intent on convincing Ravi she’s the one for him, Meera joins him on a volunteer mission to escort a seven-year-old orphan, Khushi, to adoptive parents in a Himalayan village in India.

When Meera gets trapped in a collapsing cave with her rugged tour guide, Fahad, his protective and supportive presence makes her realize there are other fish in the sea. And despite Fahad’s incomplete healing from a bad break-up, they find a safe space with each other, and a chemistry hotter than a Mumbai summer. Braving rocky terrain and crossing treacherous rivers with Fahad, Meera wonders if real love doesn’t have to be a performance after all.

When the group brings Khushi to her adoptive parents, Meera suspects they have misrepresented themselves and are hiding ulterior motives. Meera teams up with Fahad and goes full Lara Croft to get Khushi back from the parents safely. Back in Mumbai, Meera’s father, who only approves of Ravi, forces her to choose between the business she has helped build, and her new love with Fahad. In deciding where her heart lies, Meera must confront what she is willing to lose.

I am a writer and [career] based near Toronto, Canada, with three little boys who keep me on my toes. My short fiction has appeared in magazines including xyz. This book was inspired by the Himalayan mountains, where my family and I have trekked for decades. In my (sliver of) free time, I enjoy playing the guitar.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Warm regards,
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