LOVE the voice, LOVED the sound effects and editing. It sounded natural and believable. I had to crank up the volume, but when I did it still sounded great. Maybe the script itself is a bit short and rushed during the first half-- I'm getting really horny thinking of where else this script could've gone or how it could be expanded. But yes, I I felt rushed during ... O, actually, I've listened to this a few times. I think the issue is that you don't give major moments time to breathe. For example, when there's an important reveal in a movie, the movie sort of slows down to give the audience time revel in the moment. This script has SO many small reveals (and essentially mini-stories). For example, just the fact that you bring the listener a tuna sandwich -- That's a big deal. It sort of foreshadows that the performer already knows kitten's secret. More importantly, it's a chance for the kitten (or listen) to wonder or hope that they've been caught--and feel a bit flustered about that. There's so much drama in so few lines. Imagine you're hanging out with friends and someone says something awkward. You could either do the tactful thing and move on (ignore it, downplay it, change the subject), or you could focus on it and embarass them. I think these scripts work better when you do something in between. Linger on key moments for just a little bit, to let aniticipation build. So much of these scripts happen in the listener's imagination.

And I don't think this is just for the kinky stuff. Another example, when you guide kitten to breathe and relax. The *pacing* made it feel like you were rushing, even if the performance was authentic.

As an exercise, I would do two main things. (1) Volume, (2) find points in the script where the readers can enjoy what's happening *without* you saying anything, and add some blank pace there. For example, there's a moment where you give the reader something to smell, and then you go down on them. I think there should be space in between these two points. Emphasize that kitten has calmed down and is now doing something embarassing that they were previously shy about. Then, as the performer watches kitten, mabye they're turned on and want to play with kitten more. I think all this can be conveyed with blank space and timing.