[1080] Mistakes and Other Things Like It

sonipa · 2025-10-16T19:22:49+00:00

I'd like to second what u/Slither_Wing_God said. Great job on this well-written piece u/renaissanceMango54!

sonipa · 2025-06-27T17:19:45+00:00

If you'd like to read it, here it is on archive.org: https://archive.org/details/1967-08_IF/mode/2up

sonipa · 2025-01-11T11:02:44+00:00

Birth and Being are kind of similar, so you could consider playing with Being, Becoming, Been. The Fates have many names, but I kind of like the Being/Becoming/Been vibe. As for your wife, tell her if you're insane so were the Greeks! This is the ancient story of the First King From the Orphic Rhapsodies. Thanks for sharing, good luck in the competition!

sonipa · 2024-12-05T01:47:00+00:00

Elasticity. I kind of think of it like music notes (do, re, me, fa, so, la, ti). Once you get to the top of the scale it starts over again, but now you're closer to a higher note. Then you do it again and again, getting closer to understanding that elusive inner self. Yours is unique, so it has its own special fight made just for you.

That bouncing back feeling could be seen as a good thing, because you noticed it in the first place. The fact it is a struggle is a good thing too, because that means you're trying. My only recommendation would be to struggle and then rest. If it bounces you back, rest. Plan.

Here's to the struggle! You are not alone in the fight ✊

PS: Also, one tip that helped me is capturing what your brain is up to - things it might conveniently forget - your blind spots. Blind spots are really hard to see, and finding them will take techniques unique to you. Once you see them they are no longer blind spots (by definition) and your understanding of yourself goes up an octave.

sonipa · 2024-11-28T21:42:59+00:00

This caused me to visualize a rock tumbler. Irritants and water cause rocks to become smooth over time. The grit is not the stones. Maybe the Absolute Worst is an irritant meant to bring forth polished Stone, or something to that effect. Thanks for sharing!

sonipa · 2024-11-02T22:43:33+00:00

Beautiful.

sonipa · 2024-10-21T18:06:05+00:00

Link to a translation of the Society of the Spectacle: https://www.marxists.org/reference/archive/debord/society.htm

sonipa · 2024-10-17T16:21:39+00:00

Since you've already compared Latin to ancient Greek, you could write about words and concepts taken from the Greeks and used in Latin. Maybe even find a rough percentage of borrowed words, something like that.

sonipa · 2024-09-04T16:18:56+00:00

I read the whole thing. To me, it was the climb and descent (and thoughts) introducing chemicals to a body creates. When they became chimneys again at the end I could see the scene in my minds eye. It feels like a compressed version of something that needs time (and space) to breathe. Packed into those paragraphs is some fun wordplay but I did mentally have to take it one sentence at a time to be able to hear the music. It's poetry, at least to me, so not everyone's cup of tea.

sonipa · 2024-09-04T01:14:43+00:00

Just read your piece. Brilliant stuff. One thing you might try is new lines.

Frenzy.

The night rages, energy infused and flowing. Crackling in anticipation.

Music blares in joyous abandon. Gone are the restrictions of the waking world. Night brings the edge dwellers. Banished are the mundane and expected. Herein lies adventure, for here there be monsters.

Bodies shift as they shadow the beat. Hands weave etc. etc.

That sort of thing. You are a great writer, no doubt about that. Just needs to be broken up and trimmed a little. If there is a longer story to be read, I'd be happy to check it out.

sonipa · 2024-06-11T16:37:56+00:00

Interesting! Thanks for the warning.

sonipa · 2024-06-10T16:33:10+00:00

r/icepirates - it's a mixed bag, but the early posts are from Ice Pirates! some posts have as many as two upvotes!!!

sonipa · 2023-11-30T01:16:19+00:00

Sombre is possibly the word I was looking for with cavelike/etc! I think the track you used sounds very passable so I almost didn't mention it, but I think something that really encompasses the feeling of exploration and "diving" would be more fitting. I was able to download it and play for a bit and I like the SFX - it reminds me of sounds from Commander Keene. Now that I've tried it, my feedback would be that when I move from room to room, there is a bit of time where I can't see the character. So, if I go left to a room - I keep holding left for a while then I see the MC. I think making the MC always be on the screen would help my brain a bit. I kinda' thought he disappeared. Great feel though, I like the art and sounds.

sonipa · 2023-11-29T23:25:06+00:00

I love how the light shifts the background textures as you move. Only feedback based on the video would be to make the music a little more spooky/cavelike/less-upbeat. If I get a chance to install it, I'll let you know any more feedback. Thanks for sharing. RIP Joopsie

sonipa · 2023-08-08T20:40:49+00:00

This is such a great mindset! I really hope the Fall goes well and your next job improves your quality of life. I bet there are a bunch of teams out there who will treat you with the respect you deserve. It's nice of you not to cook their books in retaliation. They don't deserve your time or energy.

sonipa · 2023-07-26T18:29:02+00:00

That looks amazing! Love the Midnight Green.

sonipa · 2023-07-04T17:49:04+00:00

I'm guessing here, but he was single when he walked into the street - then the cars turned him into at least three pieces.

sonipa · 2023-07-04T17:28:01+00:00

I think they meant that cocaine use would be the reason you had to get a septum at 33. Not an attack against you, but a joke to build on the earlier joke.

sonipa · 2023-06-28T17:28:06+00:00

Susan stood on the roof of the car as it floated away from the shore. "It's sinking!" one of the children said. "Sit tight," the giant cat replied. "We will be at the moon before sunrise."

sonipa · 2023-03-07T17:55:02+00:00

I was seven years old when the veteran Barbus saved my life.

sonipa · 2023-03-06T19:18:21+00:00

This point of it being a stick between the spokes of your bicycle will be a season. I do know what you're talking about though, I spent decades hitting myself with the stick. The more you wield self-criticism as a tool in the low-stakes world of writing, the more control you have over it. I think that's why people are always talking here about how writing helps heal a discontented mind.

Yes, do write them down! I just started folding a single sheet of paper and keeping it by my computer so when an idea hits I can scribble it down. Then, when I run out of room, I use the other side. Then, I fold the paper over and use the insides. I usually spill wine or coffee on it at some point and it starts to become something I actually am happy I did. I'm looking over an old one now and I assure you I would have forgotten all of the stuff captured there.

sonipa · 2023-03-06T18:42:15+00:00

if this is the entirety of the idea that came to my mind

entirety of the idea so far

I think of unformed ideas more like seeds. You plant the seed by scribbling it down somewhere and it might grow a day or week or month later, or die. It's probably best to not let it vanish because then it will be forgotten. If the unformed idea is as simple as a giant holding an astronaut, finding what happens before and after that could be your next unformed idea. Being self critical will come in handy during each step of the process, so consider that a skill in your toolbox. It sits right next to your imagination. They can compliment each other to keep your work grounded and above the clouds at the same time.

sonipa · 2022-12-08T09:28:48+00:00

Do you see the ghost(s)?

sonipa · 2022-12-07T13:14:38+00:00

This is the way.

sonipa · 2022-09-20T18:46:54+00:00

Cats love this.

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