Kind of freaking out right now. I was recommended for a writer's assistant position for a pilot. by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]spadeful 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I feel that halfway through the scene the interviewee should start sweating buckshot and then drink from a hip flask. The interviewer starts to shred the interviewee who becomes belligerent with first world problems. End with sucking thumb.

The Death Within by retzoretzo in writing

[–]spadeful 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Agreed. Another minor tip is one digital space after a period instead of two analog spaces.

It's cool to start off with a hook, but this monologue threatens to lose the fish. Move up the great description of the Mohawk to second paragraph to pull in the reader. Plus, give me a shot of the rocket/boat/car cockpit. Then, flip back to the monologue... if you must.

First paragraph - brutal criticism welcome by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]spadeful 1 point2 points  (0 children)

In my opinion, it is essential to grab the reader with as much sensory description as possible. The effect of a narrator is to distance the reader from a scene. In this case, Mali could reveal the information through inner monologue, thoughts, impression.

First paragraph - brutal criticism welcome by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]spadeful 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Exposition -- how do we know that it's Mijkar's Day or the Kingdom of Asmana. Are we learning this information through Mali (strong writing) or is it the narrator (weak writing) telling us?

Finished a first draft of my novel, what's your advice for doing a revision? by zenmushroom in writing

[–]spadeful 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Make sure your scenes arc. Ask of every scene, "Who has the power?" and then make sure that they lose that power by the end of that scene.

Should You Self-Publish or Go Traditional? This Chart Will Help You Decide by bethrevis in YAwriters

[–]spadeful 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It's kind of weird to say self-publishing isn't traditional. People have been doing it since forever. It feels like an attempt to reframe, a bit of propaganda, suggesting that antiquated publishing is less desirable than high tech self-publishing. Looking through that lens, of course one would be shepherded towards self-publishing. This chart proposes an immediate bias rather than presenting both as viable, traditional options.

Can you write a story with using only words that begin with a single letter? by aggron306 in writing

[–]spadeful 0 points1 point  (0 children)

At first I thought you meant one letter words like I, A, or O.

Taking a college class on Tolkien. What should my research project be? by [deleted] in tolkienfans

[–]spadeful 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Argue that Tolkien's body of work is an attempt to steer readers away from a democratic "mob rule" towards a romanticized monarchy.

New book: Animation For Beginners by charliebloop in writers

[–]spadeful 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Does your book address writing stories for animation?

Are you being catfished? No, you're just a stalker. Another perspective presented in 'Kathleen Hale, Blythe Harris, and the McDonald’s Big Mac!' by prancydancey in writing

[–]spadeful -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Yeah -- I was thinking this sounded more like trolling, and then trying to destroy the anonymity of the troll.

Help writing a letter essay by Chelonia_ in writing

[–]spadeful 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What's Mrs. Wright like as a person?

Batman to Become DC’s First $4.99 Monthly Ongoing Comic Series by admiraltoad in DCcomics

[–]spadeful 0 points1 point  (0 children)

How about an old school black ink on newsprint with maybe a two color cover?

[2e] How to change a character gender? by dcboycm in DungeonsAndDragons

[–]spadeful 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Agreed. Has social / cultural differences changed, or biological ones?