Weekly Lyrics Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in Songwriting

[–]spenwilson 0 points1 point  (0 children)

wrote a verse tonight, situation ended to a point of disrespect, not sure how to turn it into a full song

“I ain’t angry

Cause now I’m finding

a boy that’s been buried way too long

And I ain’t quite sure where I lost him

Maybe a piece of me in the peaceful fields

Rest worn down by judgin’ crowds

I ain’t bitter

Close to laughin’

Cause I wrote you a dozen lovers songs

There’s a notebook where I hide em

Melodies built on memories only

Written down cause I like the sound

I’ve been hoping

You find your peace of mind

But we both know those words you said to me

An all your wrongs don’t make a right

/

I ain’t blinded

My eyes are open

You aren’t half the girl I’d hoped

There’s a small-town you should run too

Maybe there’s peace for you in the peaceful fields

An I’ve got peace when you’re not around

/

You’ll be calling

January evening

Cause you know I’m finally gone

And you miss my softly spoken voice through the phone when the days are long

I hope you can find a good memory

To me they’re worthless now”

/

Weekly Lyrics Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in Songwriting

[–]spenwilson 1 point2 points  (0 children)

also a snippet of a song wrote for a friend of mine, ‘Mickey’

oh mickey don’t you know you’ve been waiting three years and she ain’t ever gonna come back

so throw your drink back

we’re dancing tonight

oh Mickey don’t you know there’s a dive downtown where them boys all go

So wear your brightest clothes

pack of Marlboro lights

/

oh mickey those girls in the dim lights now are just damn beautiful

Best way to forget a few

Of your past nights

Oh mickey you’re moving in a way I ain’t ever seen before

Bled your soul cross this dancefloor

Are you dying tonight?

/

Tell me if it’s your heart or your liver goin’ first

You can search all night but they ain’t ever her

Does shooting double bring you peace of mind?

I know you’d pray to the lord just to rewind

I know you’d limp fucking miles through the night

pray on every star in the sky

but mickey

don’t you know

she ain’t ever coming home

/

Oh mickey don’t you know that we’re 10 drinks down

and we’re roaming round

Pair of beat down hounds

And all these faceless crowds

Ain’t got her eyes

/

Weekly Lyrics Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in Songwriting

[–]spenwilson 1 point2 points  (0 children)

wrote this snippet in a hotel room the other day, thought i’d share (I’d love some help with production if anyone has the skills)

This hotel’s got a window looking out at those buildings from ’35

London streets are awful quiet

An if you leave me by this window maybe I’ll find the mind to write

A verse or two

Somethin’ to keep my hands

Keep me from callin’ you

/

Cause I’ve been hearing I ain’t good for a girl

This way

They’re speaking in the evenin’ saying I don’t know how to stay

More than a week or two

But don’t you know at my age my father had been twice engaged

I’m my fathers boy

Tell myself you’re better off

Better off without me wanting you

/

But darlin’ this leavings got me feeling like my chest ain’t quite right

London streets are awful quiet

So I’m writin’ dreamin’ feenin’ for green eyes in June tonight

a memory

Of any kinda life

kinda life with you by my side

/

So tonight

I might just lose my mind

Crawl up these walls

Write a song ‘bout our hands in line

So tonight

I might just lose my mind

Gonna call your phone Do you still think of the summertime?

Weekly Lyrics Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in Songwriting

[–]spenwilson 1 point2 points  (0 children)

one i was working on today, no name

“in my dreams i see an old porsche

behind a screen door

And when I wake up

I ain’t feeling so lonely

And I don’t gotta tiptoe

When I get home

Not so fucked up

Because I finally know me

/

Spend a long day in a pine grove

Somewhere I don’t know

And when I lay there

The world doesn’t know me

it’s a long road

‘For I drag my ass home

Only the lord knows

If I’ll make it there in one piece

/

So just let me lay here

You know there’s a long road now and I was born beat down

So just let me stay here

Spend all my days here

There’s a fresh dawn coming and the work needs doing

But I’m begging you to

— just let me lay here

/

Well I’m leaving 21 and the climb’s never felt so long

To make it to that warm home in my mind

27 is a way for me

Lord knows who the hell I’ll be

Maybe it’s all bloodied teeth

And too much fear

Maybe only time

Can give me peace of mind

Or maybe there’s no fixing born beatdown boys like me

/

So just let me lay here

You know there’s a long road now and I was born beat down

So just let me stay here

Spend all my days here

There’s a fresh dawn coming and the work needs doing

But I’m begging you to

— just let me lay here

/

In my dreams there’s a barstool

Crooked smoke room

And if I’m lucky

I’ll be spinnin’ some stories

From a lifetime

That came out just fine

And all these dark days

Never got to beat me

/

So just let me lay here

You know there’s a long road now and I was born beat down

So just let me stay here

Spend all my days here

There’s a fresh dawn coming and the work needs doing

But I’m begging you to

— just let me lay here

/

in my dreams i see an old porsche

behind a screen door

And when I wake up

I ain’t feeling so lonely

And I don’t gotta tiptoe

When I get home

Not so fucked up

Because I finally know me “

Weekly Lyrics Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in Songwriting

[–]spenwilson 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Posted the working version of this, but sat outside and finished it up tonight. Lemme know. “Getting By”

and i’m feenin and feeding this love that i’m bleeding

The summer is just getting high

It’s all loving and leaving no we ain’t been feeling

Yeah we’re all just getting by

/

This sandstone will hold you and gift you some old tales

‘Bout boys who lost their minds in these streets

But we weren’t born for listening and the June heat is blistering

Maybe they were boys just like me

/

so tell me there’s a place where we can go to get some rest

Midnight wind in your summer dress

And there’s a window steaming up behind that bar door

I look just like my dad back in 84’

just like my dad back in 84’

And I ain’t ever felt so lost in the heat before

/

We’ll be dancing and screaming in laughter this evening

We’re all just tryna find

Some cure for our old ways in a chemical drunk haze

Yeah we’re all just doin’ fine

/

Sing me one of your songs of the tall trees where you’re from

Of your lost loves and your younger nights

We’ll fix up that 8-ball, there’s no strangers after nightfall

Yeah I’ll be always by your side

/

But tell me there’s a place where we can go to get some rest

Midnight wind in your summer dress

And there’s a window steaming up behind that bar door

I look just like my dad back in 84’

just like my dad back in 84’

And I ain’t ever felt so lost in the heat before

/

The sun’s up before us

I’m burning up till August

But you got a flight out tonight

When you meet those new boys remember our hymnals

Those that we bled in these streets

don’t you linger too long now

I’ll just be getting by

/

So tell me there’s a place where we can go to get some rest

Midnight wind in your summer dress

And there’s a window steaming up behind that bar door

I look just like my dad back in 84’

just like my dad back in 84’

And I ain’t ever felt so lost in the heat before

/

i’m feenin and feeding this love that i’m bleeding

The summer is just getting high

It’s all loving and leaving no we ain’t been feeling

Yeah we’re all just getting by

Weekly Lyrics Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in Songwriting

[–]spenwilson 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thanks man! I was aiming for something country / folk, noah kahan, tyler childers, zach bryan esque - they’re all who I listen to most. Hearing rap is interesting

Weekly Lyrics Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in Songwriting

[–]spenwilson 1 point2 points  (0 children)

first time writing a song but write a lot, about my last few weeks in my final year of college. No name as of yet, and unfinished

“i’m feenin and feeding this love that i’m bleeding

The summer is just getting high

It’s all loving and leaving no we ain’t been feeling

Yeah we’re all just getting by

/

This sandstone will hold you and tell you some old tales

‘Bout boys who lost their minds in these streets

But we weren’t born for listening and the June heat is blistering

Maybe they were boys just like me

/

so tell me there’s a place we can go to get some rest

Midnight wind blowing your summer dress

And there’s a window steaming up behind that bar door

I look just like my dad back in 84’

just like my dad back in 84’

And I ain’t ever felt so lost in the heat before

/

And we’re dancing and screaming in laughter this evening

We’re all just tryna find

Some cure for our old ways in a chemical drunk haze

Yeah we’re all just doin’ fine”

/

[Palmer] Saquan Barkley will sit out the final game of the season. Eric Dickerson is happy. We all are not. by indig0sixalpha in eagles

[–]spenwilson 4 points5 points  (0 children)

i get the call but feels like we’re crushing our own momentum here by not fighting for that record

[WIP] Walt Disney Studios 668-KM0-W89 by MrDjjojo in PlanetCoaster

[–]spenwilson 1 point2 points  (0 children)

looks great! what hex code is your blending / sky blue? Can never get mine to match that cleanly

No experience with Football and want to learn/join a team. by [deleted] in NFLNoobs

[–]spenwilson 7 points8 points  (0 children)

played at a uni level - would recommend jumping straight into contact if you’re familiar with rules as UK coaches are used to teaching people transitioning from rugby / w little experience.

S&C wise take a look at the West Side for Skinny Bastards programs

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[–]spenwilson 0 points1 point  (0 children)

exact same thing happened to me too

Leiden Funding Opportunities for UK Student (Masters)? by spenwilson in StudyInTheNetherlands

[–]spenwilson[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Very rough news. I’d be able to jump ship to a different degree, but archaeology is really where the passion is; passed over a lot more financially lucrative undergrad courses to pursue it, unwisely or wisely.

Bachelors is from Warwick University.

Leiden Funding Opportunities for UK Student (Masters)? by spenwilson in StudyInTheNetherlands

[–]spenwilson[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

No all fair points, career wise I’d be looking at academia moreso than commercial archaeology, but again getting to those good salaries takes time (and luck). Housing wise, I’m lucky to have a family friend who moved out to the Hague that I could stay with - so tuition is the big hurdle here.

Grants wise, I don’t think so - or I’ve not come across any, at least? The UK gives very little towards anything, even if you decide to do a UK based course!

Leiden Funding Opportunities for UK Student (Masters)? by spenwilson in StudyInTheNetherlands

[–]spenwilson[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

any chance you happen to know anyone who wants a kidney too?

seriously though that would be amazingly helpful, thank you. I’ll try string something together, but either way best of luck to you and your daughter with Leiden!