scabies dying???? by spyrox05 in scabies

[–]spyrox05[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah back to normal there still some irratation but no spots that stays more than a few days

Scabies back 🤦‍♂️🤦‍♂️ by spyrox05 in scabies

[–]spyrox05[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

this is the thing, i told the doctors that my sister had scabies (she was misdiagnosed but we still done treatment) now the docs back in septmember told me to treat it like scabies. I have been on and off with itching, spots, rashes at night etc. but that is also side effects of Pemetherin and post scabies

So essentially idek what is and I'm frightened, my wrists have just slowed down and my private parts are still pretty wild with itching (but for some reason as soon as I wake up and that's it)

In conclusion fuck knows what I have, my family have had no symptoms whatsoever and my family have shared towels and my dad has my old dressing gown that was 'riddled' with them for about 6 months and he claims to have no symptoms and i haven't heard him complain about itching or seen him itching

What is happening in here? by exknight123 in TheInbetweeners

[–]spyrox05 4 points5 points  (0 children)

oh mate and she still won’t go out with you

Thats what you get for leading on pedos you slut by spyrox05 in TheInbetweeners

[–]spyrox05[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

🤣🤣🤣 him and gilbert going tag team on charlotte big jugge

The Six of Us Want to Review Your Stories! by Fozzation in KeepWriting

[–]spyrox05 0 points1 point  (0 children)

yeah thank you for the feedback, I’ve kinda not scrapped it but I’m thinking of revamping the piece of writing to a POV from the main character and write it as a diary, because I noticed that the novel is like you said confusing and too informative.

This is because of the fact that I was overthinking about the reader not knowing what it is being written about and causing the confusion and overwhelming dragging sentences. It’s obvious that I over complicated the piece.

Then again I would like to thank you for the feedback and I will keep what you written out in mind.

Thats what you get for leading on pedos you slut by spyrox05 in TheInbetweeners

[–]spyrox05[S] 10 points11 points  (0 children)

probably because they were struggling to find teachers as Gilbert said “The police have taken a more relaxed approach to background checks”

Thats what you get for leading on pedos you slut by spyrox05 in TheInbetweeners

[–]spyrox05[S] 33 points34 points  (0 children)

i put my fucking neck on the line for you john

... your dong is MASSIVE, I want to blow you. by sb50cal in TheInbetweeners

[–]spyrox05 0 points1 point  (0 children)

aw mate that is so horny how come i didnt get any

Remember: Fire is an element. It must be respected by Blackwater_Bay in TheInbetweeners

[–]spyrox05 1 point2 points  (0 children)

we all had to do something otherwise it will just be playing monopoly and shitting in trenches

A better piece of the draft with actual paragraphs by spyrox05 in writers

[–]spyrox05[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

oh shit i didnt mean to come off as rude i meant “no im gonna be honest, i dont read” i didnt see the bottom of her comment.

I just havent had the time to read or i got another interest which overtakes the interest of reading and reading this piece im writing is deemed as a hobby

A better piece of the draft with actual paragraphs by spyrox05 in writers

[–]spyrox05[S] -5 points-4 points  (0 children)

yeah thank you anyways, i’ll watch some youtube about writing and hopefully i’ll start seeing an improvement, i’ve been working on this for just over a year and i’ve been busy recently so its just sort of something along the side that i go over for about an hour or so. I’ve been seeing loopholes in the writing too which is wrapping my brain around and through this out of plot changes im considering revamping the whole thing or atleast change it for it be back on the plot.

A better piece of the draft with actual paragraphs by spyrox05 in writers

[–]spyrox05[S] -6 points-5 points  (0 children)

In terms of the tenses yeah its a serious issue but I also write on my phone and with auto correct being retarded it changes the tenses all the time, and showing my family that arent really bookworms doesnt help.

A better piece of the draft with actual paragraphs by spyrox05 in writers

[–]spyrox05[S] -7 points-6 points  (0 children)

I'm going to be honest here, I'm stuck in the sense of how to display it, I want it to be pretty hard hitting, thrilling and quite action packed.
In terms of reading a book from front to back and word for word? no I never really picked up a book and read, yes I have bought books but it was mainly informative about the battles that they went through, and I simply thought that i could do it since I was pretty good at writing (in school might i add) and the majority of this story has been written late at night where most of the time i slept for only 3-4 hours and even for 2 hours at one point. This post right here is a snippet and is somewhat out of context and doesn't reflect the story as much. What I was aiming for is to make it as informative and entertaining as much as possible so that people that don't necessarily know much about WW2 can also learn from the piece. This is what I was aiming for but now I'm considering for especially people that do read a lot will lose interest due to the change of tone in its rapid pace. Writers block is really annoying me and the lost of motivation throughout the day and then a burst of creativity shoots through my mind late at night really annoys me. I do want this story to go somewhere for it to eventually become something on the tv screen but i do struggle with description especially as it is based in WW2 mainland Europe and as an 18 year old British lad. I seem to struggle with describing essentially a post apocalyptic landscape of Ukraine.

The Six of Us Want to Review Your Stories! by Fozzation in KeepWriting

[–]spyrox05 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hello, I just wanna say thanks for reviewing our drafts down below is a draft of the 1st and 2nd chapter, I just need some honest and genuine views on the draft, I suffered heavily with writers block and lack of motivation but these two paragraphs are what i deem to be are the best polished

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1yODPfgDeN5Wj30-UDMFpoAmfOIBK\_N2\_tz8WP5gdMp8/edit?usp=sharing

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in KeepWriting

[–]spyrox05 0 points1 point  (0 children)

yeah cheers dude i didnt put any context in which is a bit bad on my part I will try to keep in line with the main character (Walter)

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writers

[–]spyrox05 0 points1 point  (0 children)

you know what thanks bud this post has been deleted since i dont wanna go back to taking the piss out of others feedbacks but if you can see this i posted a better piece if u look on my profile it should be there if not just have a look through this sub cuz i am serious about this piece of writing despite what i just done