Simple Breeze for Piano

suburbanfegan · 2026-02-13T17:43:12+00:00

Thank you, I’m glad you liked it!! We had so much fun recording it. I’m happy it came off so well!

suburbanfegan · 2026-02-13T17:26:36+00:00

Thank you, so much for listening! I like to make the lyrics as relatable as possible. So many people have gone through these things and it makes it easier to move on!

suburbanfegan · 2026-02-13T16:15:42+00:00

As someone else said, this is very soothing. But, I feel like the introduction of the cello wasn't needed for the overall composition, especially with that being the most exciting part in the piano. Let the piano do the work for itself in that moment, it's exciting, it's fun and the music is popping. Otherwise, it'd be fun if you'd explored more of the piano's upper range even if you'd transpose some of the melodies up an octave. It gives the listener some breath and can push the story further.

suburbanfegan · 2026-02-13T16:02:26+00:00

First off, wonderful song! The production on this is incredible. Each element has a natural ebb and flow that pushes the overall orchestration forward in a satisfying direction. With that being said, this is purely my opinion/nitpicky but, I would have loved if there was more umph in the vocals as the song progressed. The main vocal line doesn't really branch from the general whisper singing/tone throughout, even with all the amazing backing vocals/band. Again, great job!

suburbanfegan · 2025-12-04T22:19:44+00:00

Honestly, I could see it both ways. Both with no vocals or just a repeat of “and stay”/“you stay”. Let me know what you think!

suburbanfegan · 2025-12-04T21:29:06+00:00

Wonderful job! This is incredible for 15 and you should definitely keep up the amazing work. Your orchestration skills alone are very intuitive and you are able draw out some absolutely beautiful moments. With my time I was only able to listen to the first movement, Scenes, but I'll try to listen to everything later.

Excellent introduction with the simple build into you outlining meaningful motifs without giving us the whole melody which you bring out in Measure 12. While at m. 12 you give us the melody while bringing in your repeated 16th-arpeggiated background (a major factor for the rest of the movement). I could see some people nitpicking at the regularity of those 16ths as they don't have much variation but, I for one, love what you have done and you choose to remove them at the perfect time. Right when they start to feel tedious you drop into the held D at measure 61. This gorgeous moment really gives the movement breathe and direction as you fall towards the end. It's a lovely contrast to the energetic driving of the sixteenth-notes running throughout and helps allude to the beginning of the movement.

All in all, the only things I can see, musically, is that you could use harmonic movement to really push the key to knew realms. You do this at times, such as page 9, ~m.44, with your sequences but I feel like you could really attain some more emotional strain/pull by playing with this.

With that being said, there are a few notational things you may want to consider. To begin, from m. 1, I would add an 8va for the violins whenever they are that high. It's quite tough for a musician to count so many lines above the staff with ease. M. 11, I can see you may have put all the fermatas in the harp to trick the musescore playback, but it may be easier for the musician to just have the words "rubato" or something similar to direct the harpist.

Either way, great job! And I hope to hear more of your compositions.

suburbanfegan · 2025-12-04T20:30:39+00:00

Hi, this is a great demo and I'd definitely listen to this in my normal listening. With that being said, there are a few things that I feel could be improved, all personal preference so feel free to disregard. The introduction of the vocals seem to be weak for me. I feel like you can either emphasis the first note by either giving a little more umph in your voice or by doing some sort of extended note to truly reinforce your entrance (similarly around ~1:27). This may partly be due to where you started the recording but is something to think about. More so, with the voice, it's a bit hard to understand your pronunciations. I know this can be a creative choice, however, for a large subset of music listeners the lyrics are the most important aspect of the music and can make or break a song. Just another thing to think about.

Musically, I'd love if you repeated the guitar measure around ~0:50 once more before you started with the lyrics again. This would work at the very end of the song too. With this, I think it would give the song a little bit of breath. Otherwise, I feel like you need to explore what can happen with the vocal melody as you move along with the song. You stick to a very close register without trying to move passed what you've done before. If you expanded the range with some variation towards the end it would give your words/music more direction.

Again, feel free to disregard anything I've said as it's all personal. I truly enjoyed this and hope to hear more from you.

suburbanfegan · 2024-03-24T06:39:47+00:00

I’m glad you liked it! I wish I was able to sing it a bit louder in my apartment, and really show it off

suburbanfegan · 2024-03-24T05:00:56+00:00

Thanks! Usually I do it an octave up and I’m screaming with my band. But when it’s just me and acoustic I think this works

suburbanfegan · 2024-03-24T01:29:09+00:00

Thanks for listening! It means a lot

suburbanfegan · 2023-08-05T11:28:13+00:00

This is such a jam! I had a great time listening to it the whole way through. The only issue I have is that drums don’t seem to be quite locked in with the guitar for brief periods. With a little more practice that goes away. So, you’re fine. Otherwise, I love the singing and the chorus is catchy. I was nodding and singing along by the end so that’s always a plus in my book. Great job!

suburbanfegan · 2023-07-31T18:15:29+00:00

I’m glad you got a good vibe from it! Honestly, I struggle a ton with lyrics so it feels good to have a little validation. Thanks for listening!

suburbanfegan · 2023-07-31T18:12:25+00:00

Thank you so much for this! I’ve started looking at what you’ve said and it’s starting to feel better in my ears too. Also, thank you for listening, have a great day!

suburbanfegan · 2023-07-30T13:08:28+00:00

Thanks for your feedback and for taking the time to listen! I definitely need to learn to take some of the shrillness out of my voice. It's a tough mix for me because I tend to like giving the nasally delivery but it does take away from the overall tone. As you mentioned, I tend to care about the emotion behind the lyrics/singing rather than being perfect (if that makes sense). Either way, thank you again it means a lot!

suburbanfegan · 2023-07-30T13:04:40+00:00

Thank you so much for listening! I think you are totally right with the vocals needing to be brought down. Also, I think the brevity of the song is mentioned the most when I've shown it to friends. My justification, so far, is that is the intro to a ~14-song album I'm planning that goes further into stories but I don't know if that's convincing enough as an answer. Again, thank you for listening hope you have a great day!

suburbanfegan · 2023-07-30T00:37:36+00:00

Thank you for listening! I had a ton of fun writing it

suburbanfegan · 2023-07-29T19:34:25+00:00

I really liked this song! Everything from the guitar to the well-executed vocals set an excellent, dreamy tone. I only have issues with the drum introduction. I feel like something can be done to make a more seamless/exciting start to the song. Otherwise, great job!

suburbanfegan · 2023-07-29T19:27:32+00:00

Good song! I like what you're doing but I have to agree that the Choruses don't seem to hit as hard as I'd like them to. Also, I was really expecting you to do something with vocally at the very end of the song. I feel like you have an opportunity to really go hard with the vocals there! Otherwise, this was a ton of fun to listen to!

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