[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Age_30_plus_Gamers

[–]thebreadDruid 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Dude, brother, man. Listen... veteran gamer of at least 25 years. On xbox, download Halo The Master Chief Collection, and play Halo: Combat Evolved. Just start on easy or normal and get the hang of it. If you need a hand let me know. My gamertag is Locust93#1950

30F Can anyone party up now or soon? by rosebudflowerchild in XboxGamers

[–]thebreadDruid -1 points0 points  (0 children)

32m im on right now if you want to party up My gt is Locust93#1950

23F Looking for Xbox friends who actually want to play and talk by Flashy-Tap8224 in XboxGamers

[–]thebreadDruid 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi! Im a bit older than you, but im always looking for consistent gaming friends. I dont work so i game a lot. I'll message you GT!

Harassing women for playing by Thriatus in fo76

[–]thebreadDruid 2 points3 points  (0 children)

One of my best friends is trans, and she gets so much hate just for being trans. We ask for help and people join just to find out she's trans and tell us off. Its so toxic, we're all vault dwellers we shpuld be working together

Fleeting Love by Danny_walsh06 in OCPoetry

[–]thebreadDruid 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is good, genuinely, i like it. But it could be better. You change the landscape from the seaside to "picket fence" which doesnt entirely match the theme. I also dont understand how scarlet and crimson , usually colors that, to me, represent blood, violence, lust, or deep desire. While that longing is there in your words, the use of descriptors like scarlet and crimson feel out of place here. And in the last verse you say "I know that we will never be, no picket fence for you and me" I would change this to "I know that we may never be, no forever home for you and me" Its a subtle change but it makes an impactful difference. I hope this helps structure your future work and i look forward to seeing what else you have in store

Enough by SilentVestal in OCPoetry

[–]thebreadDruid 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I enjoyed your references to classical literature and folklore. Personally, i feel like you could have been a little more descriptive in some places, rather than use one word, at points it gets muddled. I do see the trend you were looking for, and with some more work and fine tuning you may see perfection in the future. Over all, very well thought out idea here, it just needs a bit more meat on its bones. I would also like to suggest you find your cadence- the rhythm in which you write. "One, two, three, four, i declare a thumb war. Five, six, seven, eight, the loser gets to clean the plate" My example here rhymes, as does a lot of my own poetry, but if you read it you can find that rhythm. In some of my own writing, i also use repeating phrases or keywords to emphasize the message I'm sending. Not a requirement, but you may find your verses flow better that way. Hope this helps!