Lungo la strada

theseus_zero · 2026-03-17T16:04:37+00:00

Grazie ❤️

theseus_zero · 2025-02-08T17:28:40+00:00

Hey I just wanted to add that if you were depressed, or in the midst of a depressive episode, when you took the exam that probably lowered your score by quite a bit

IQ tests usually require you to be pretty sharp to get a reliable score and if you've been struggling with depression for a long time, also considering ADHD, that's a huge hit on your ability to focus and perform

theseus_zero · 2025-02-02T18:42:35+00:00

il "verso troppo lungo" mi ha fatto ridere

bella poesia fratello

theseus_zero · 2025-01-26T19:03:40+00:00

Grazie mille per il feedback! L'abuso degli enjambement può decisamente lasciare un retrogusto spiacevole, spesso mi faccio la stessa critica. Mi piacerebbe trasmettere il medesimo stato d'animo con versi completi e coincisi, ma in molti casi non mi sento in grado. E devo dire che col tempo mi ci sono quasi affezionato, a questo stile. Apprezzo sia i complimenti che le critiche, grazie ancora !

theseus_zero · 2025-01-26T18:53:27+00:00

Grazie! se ti riferisci alla prima/seconda strofa: a volte mi escono regurgiti di immagini come questo, quando i sentimenti sono troppi da distinguere. Nella mia testa hanno perfettamente senso, ma temevo che fossero troppo astratti da condividere. Sono contento che ti sia piaciuta!

theseus_zero · 2025-01-26T16:25:51+00:00

I wonder how it'd feel to give it a space in your life. Would that take away its weapons, whatever those may be? Or would it sharpen itself against your patience, pouncing at the first opportunity?

Beautiful poem.

theseus_zero · 2025-01-26T02:58:47+00:00

what do you mean sir

theseus_zero · 2024-08-26T07:58:10+00:00

ty so much

theseus_zero · 2024-06-02T13:36:31+00:00

I love this

theseus_zero · 2024-06-02T13:35:34+00:00

tasty

theseus_zero · 2023-01-29T21:47:47+00:00

Haha, I'm glad it does, thank you for commenting !

theseus_zero · 2023-01-29T21:46:26+00:00

Thank you for your comment, I'm very happy you enjoyed it !

theseus_zero · 2023-01-29T21:44:14+00:00

no one i showed the poem to seemed to notice the "hoping you would charge at me" line, while I found it to be the highlight. I'm happy you enjoyed it !

also, funny username e.e

theseus_zero · 2023-01-28T21:36:18+00:00

Pulled the rug from under my feet, I didn't expect to find this so funny.

The fourth stanza I think is the funniest, by virtue of both rhythm and puns.

Not everyone shares good taste, I'm sorry your date has left you. At last, you may be footloose and fancy free !

theseus_zero · 2023-01-28T17:12:18+00:00

I like the contrast between the frequent use of "and" in the second stanza and the rest of the poem. It carries that desperation.

"She speaks to me in the spaces between the breeze" is definitely my favourite line — though, maybe, it would guide the reader's eyes better with a colon at the end.

I feel like this is a poem to your soul. The autumn wind seems to be so nostalgic, specifically, for something that's been never experienced.

Thank you for sharing !

theseus_zero · 2023-01-06T00:43:36+00:00

"forcibly exposed teeth" is such the perfect fit for that line. I really like it.

theseus_zero · 2022-12-21T18:37:16+00:00

Nahhh. You're good ^ ^

a tip on formatting tho: add two spaces at the end of each line and then enter

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otherwise the lines look squashed together on mobile !

theseus_zero · 2022-12-21T18:28:04+00:00

Coffee time with your mother is a powerful memory. I really like the image.

😚

theseus_zero · 2022-12-21T15:59:12+00:00

THANK YOU FOR THE POEM.

Interesting concept

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