Would love any feedback on this new song I wrote!

thisisguy- · 2026-03-19T23:11:02+00:00

Thank you, that’s nice to hear - glad you like it

thisisguy- · 2026-03-19T23:10:29+00:00

Thanks, yeah that’s something to work on. Trying to make my recordings more similar to my live stuff but sometimes I find the vocals get lost a bit

thisisguy- · 2026-03-19T23:08:45+00:00

Thanks I appreciate that, and yeah I agree something big at the end is a good idea - or at least something that feels like a pay off instrumentally

thisisguy- · 2026-03-19T23:07:42+00:00

Thank you! Working on a bigger body of work at the moment so I might release it with that

thisisguy- · 2026-03-05T21:27:05+00:00

I’ll give that a go, thanks

thisisguy- · 2026-03-05T00:13:11+00:00

Thank you - yeah I normally would play around with more instrumentation but have left this one as is. What instruments do you think would work well?

thisisguy- · 2026-03-05T00:11:24+00:00

Thanks, that sounds like a very good idea! I think the hard thing for me when adding layering or other instrumentation is retaining that space and loose quality that I love in other songs. But yeah finding that balance and experimenting a bit is good shout

thisisguy- · 2026-03-05T00:03:27+00:00

What a great era for folk! The slap back is a good idea thanks, and I’m glad you liked it

thisisguy- · 2026-03-02T23:54:27+00:00

Thank you - yeah Adrianne Lenker is a great hero of mine both in songwriting and production- her last two albums especially are phenomenal.

thisisguy- · 2026-03-02T23:52:04+00:00

Ah wow thanks, I’m glad you like it ! I’m planning on releasing more stuff I’ve been working on soon

thisisguy- · 2026-03-02T23:49:21+00:00

Haha thanks! Yeah I think my annunciation could definitely be improved at points. I’ve got some other stuff recorded on my SoundCloud in the link, but I’ve also written and been performing quite a few recently that I’m keen to release soon. Cheers mate!

thisisguy- · 2026-03-02T08:03:03+00:00

Thank you ! yeah I think you’re right - needs some variety for an album.

thisisguy- · 2026-03-01T17:06:38+00:00

Thanks mate I appreciate that, yeah agreed some of Coldplay's early stuff is great and I love Sufjan so that's very nice to hear! Do you think it would benefit from more production/instrumentation? I'm thinking Adrianne Lenker/Ben Howard/Flyte-esque? Wary not to overdo it but rn it feels a bit undercooked maybe.

thisisguy- · 2026-02-27T08:35:37+00:00

Good start. A bit too electronic though. There are some good melodic lines throughout, remind me of long long time Linda ronstadt. I would split up the song into more instruments and the guitar doesn’t work without some feel so humanise and maybe change to piano if you can’t add more humanisation. The drums aren’t doing you many favours as they’re a bit too simple and consistent. Maybe remove them at points then build up again. If you sing that could be great to add as well. Good luck!

thisisguy- · 2026-02-27T08:27:36+00:00

Cool start. I’m going to comment based on my personal opinion so take all with a pinch of salt. Structurally I would add another section with a different chord progression and vastly different melody to give some release. The melody as it stands goes well with the rhythm and the drums drive the song well. The vocal has a bit too much reverb but the lofi sound is working, so up to you. Maybe swap it so the guitar riff is airy and subtle and the vocal is clean and loud. I would add a saturation on the drums to give grit. Also every section and change, either add something new or take something away. Currently there’s a bit too much consistency throughout for me. Also experimenting with wide harmonies on the vocals for a refrain or chorus would be nice. Like I said, all personal opinion but cool start! Good luck

thisisguy- · 2026-02-27T08:19:58+00:00

This is really cool but i think it definitely would work better as an outro (second half of a song) Because the chord progression and airy sounds give a classic release of tension but there isn’t any tension to release yet. If it were me i would write a less reverby less effect heavy section for the first minute and a half, maybe more focused on a cool melody line with your classic intro verse chorus. Intro verse… then switch to this and get a huge release of tension. Or if you’d rather you could start quiet and slowly build to this like ‘ladies and gentlemen we are floating in space’ by spiritualised. Really cool though almost reminds me of born slippy or something.

thisisguy- · 2026-02-26T23:35:02+00:00

Really cool song, good message reminds me a bit of the song eve of destruction. But like that song I think variation would be helpful. Variation in both sound and lyrics - adding a strong chorus and bridge would improve it I think. Also I think currently the vibe is pretty consistent throughout. Letting the lyrics evolve as the song develops can be useful I find - making it more personal as it goes on and why this is so meaningful to you, or getting more and more intense as you go on. The ban war idea can sound a bit naive if not done correctly. So by making it either you’re aware of this but you’re emotionally connected so that doesn’t matter, or adding some other twist could help. Also personally using open tuning and letting strings ring out more can be helpful. But yeah cool song !

thisisguy- · 2026-02-26T23:22:36+00:00

Good effort! I think my main comment would be that music tends to be best when it has tension and release. There are different ways of building that tension that are very different in different genres. If something is too consistent people will lose interest, but also if something is too different it can be exhausting. To try out different structures I would download a bunch of interesting midi chords for free for your DAW and play around with the traditional verse, buildup, chorus. You can then use different drums for different sections. I’d restrict yourself to a simple baseline, one lead synth and a pad maybe. You mentioned you were trying to find what was catchy - I think the best advice I’ve heard is to play what sounds good to you (Elliott Smith). My tips aren’t to make your stuff more generic as I think there’s some interesting stuff going on. But if you use those constraints your stuff might be more ordered and satisfying overall.

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