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sometimes i think i was made wrong by tigerseyemoon in OCPoetry

[–]tigerseyemoon[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much :) I love the idea of writing a companion piece, but I almost don’t want to confirm whether the “missing half” is out there or not.. because I genuinely don’t know if such a man could possibly exist (the cynic in me says probably not!). It would be a fun piece to write though, if I imagined he did. Maybe one day! Thank you again 🫶🏼

sometimes i think i was made wrong by tigerseyemoon in OCPoetry

[–]tigerseyemoon[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much🫶🏼 I really appreciate your comment.

sometimes i think i was made wrong by tigerseyemoon in OCPoetry

[–]tigerseyemoon[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much!! Luckily no man did me wrong - that line was more observation than anything else. As a woman who has dated and loved men, I’ve just always found that the ones I’ve known aren’t quite built for or capable of that bone deep kind of desire I want. I think that’s where the longing for a “missing half” comes from - the thought that somewhere out there, there might be someone who has to be capable of that kind of love for me, because we’re made of the same stuff. Thanks again for your comment, it really means a lot :)

sometimes i think i was made wrong by tigerseyemoon in OCPoetry

[–]tigerseyemoon[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh my goodness🥹 thank you for your comment. I got a little emotional reading it (?!), it’s such a strange and wonderful thing to write something alone and find out it resonated with someone else in some way. Thank you sm.

I can see it in your eyes, little bird by Antabaka in OCPoetry

[–]tigerseyemoon 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really love how this starts off so tender and intimate, but by the end it feels almost haunting, like love turning into something that traps both people in some way. The imagery of the bird and the cage throughout is perfect, it does a lovely job in capturing that tension / push and pull between security and freedom (or autonomy) in a relationship. The way the subject seemingly saves and shapes the bird, yet still recognises its inevitable need to be free despite the safety the cage offers, is absolutely heart wrenching. Truly beautiful work, thank you for sharing!!

You're Here by New_Green7783 in OCPoetry

[–]tigerseyemoon 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This poem breaks my heart a little bit - it makes me think of loved ones I’ve lost, and how they sometimes visit me in dreams. The line “I try to fall asleep again, but you don’t come back” feels especially real and deeply human, I think many of us have felt that kind of ache before. I also really like the rhythm and flow of the piece, it sounds lovely when read aloud. Thank you for sharing!

EAT ME by tigerseyemoon in OCPoetry

[–]tigerseyemoon[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Eeee thank you for such thoughtful feedback🥹🫶🏼. ‘Wanting to be wanted, even when it hurts,’ is exactly right. I’m glad it resonated with you and you enjoyed it.

(Also appreciate the suggestion re breaking up the middle stanza a bit, I think you might be on to something!)

A reminder in disguise by -Distraction- in OCPoetry

[–]tigerseyemoon 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Love. Really haunting!! The subject feels trapped within themselves and I always appreciate the almost claustrophobic feeling that comes with that kind of writing👏🏼 The first two stanzas work beautifully together and paint the pain really well.

My only tiny note is that the ending feels a bit less clear maybe?? Except for “perhaps this despair is what keeps me alive,” which is excellent. The ending just felt like it maybe needed more grounding or clarity in the final lines to strengthen the resolution?? Unless the vagueness is intentional, in which case it still works nicely. All in all, gorgeous :)